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Discussion in 'Creative Traditional' started by JolieH, Apr 16, 2008.



    JolieH JPiC Contributor

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    In the Woods


    We're finally there,
    you and I,
    underground
    in the woods
    where ants gnaw roots.
    They're ugly, creepy,
    have no eyes.
    ~
    But we don't
    mind.
    We're having tea,
    and I have a new hat.
    The grass is mowed,
    and I'm sleeping
    near where the babies
    look out.
    ~
    You brought your cap
    and baseball bat.
    I can catch
    In my mitt,
    and throw
    like a girl,
    some.
    ~
    On the green grass
    above the roots,
    In the clearing
    near Hansel and Gretel's cottage.
    ~
    Those mean boys
    Can't find us,
    Nobody knows about this place.
    There's sun all year,
    and the ants have no eyes.


    Posted By JolieH | Apr 16, 2008
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    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    Wonderful images Jolie.
    This is playful and I enjoyed immensily.
    I can't believe no one's commented yet
    so I will be the first. I like the parts
    about the ants....hehe Well done!


    Posted By Moonchild | Apr 20, 2008
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    JolieH JPiC Contributor

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    Thank you Karen.
    Ants can a nuisance at any event.


    Posted By JolieH | Apr 20, 2008
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    Dear Jolie,

    Haha! I loved this and you have a unique way of writing that simply draws us in and when we are, it's heavenly. I love this whimsical, playful, and delightful poem! I read several times and each time my smile emerges. The lines about the ants are classic! Thank you for posting Jolie! Hope you had a splendid Birthday! Love ya!

    Kim :)

    JolieH JPiC Contributor

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    Thanks Kim,

    I had fun with this one.


    Posted By JolieH | Apr 23, 2008
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