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    There is a place
    where my love feeds a fountain
    There is a place
    where my shadows fire the light
    There is a place
    where heaven kissed me
    on my cheek
    There is a place
    where I learned to believe

    In your eyes
    bluer than the ocean
    In your smile
    wide as the sky
    In your laughter
    I find myself drowning
    In your little hand
    may you always find mine

    There is a place
    where angels dream of flying
    There is a place
    where the stars stand in awe
    There is a place
    where summer lasts forever
    There is a place
    where whispers meet the wind

    In your eyes
    bluer than the ocean
    In your smile
    wide as the sky
    In your laughter
    I find myself crying
    In wonder of
    your little hand in mine


    Posted By zaac | Nov 17, 2006
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    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    lovely poem zaac as I don't like all that you've posted but this one is remarkably moving and well thought

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    what do you mean you don't like my stuff lol :0)

    just kidding. i wish you had posted and told me what you didnt care for. If it is something internal to the poems, I'd appreciate any suggestions. I'm curious to know which pieces you didn't care for and why...just for the perspective I mean. I'd like to know if there are things you did or didnt see in them or if its the style. Sometimes it's hard to see how a piece looks from the inside. It's kinda like the difference between having someone read your poem and reading it to them. You lose a lot between the mind and the paper.

    I have a pretty thick skin and not much surprises me, so I doubt you're going to hurt my feelings. Please feel free to let me know. Thanks for the compliment by the way.

    zaac


    Posted By zaac | Nov 18, 2006
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