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    Room for one
    Inhabitant number three
    An ideal view to the sun
    Come home to me.

    I can draw a map
    Upon my forehead, my skin
    A projection of the dead.

    If you choose to entrap
    The tiny zombie residing within
    My skull, I'll try to mull
    Over the time that we lived.

    Face-to-face we stand,
    Our toes sinking in sand,
    Maybe it was about time
    We let go

    Room for one
    Inhabitant number three
    An ideal view to the sun
    But you never chose me.


    Posted By ¤Me¤ | Feb 21, 2011
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    Azekiel-Horizon New Member

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    Hi how are you my fellow poet? I really like this piece. The imagery in this poem stood out especially in these lines

    quote=¤Me¤;35572]I can draw a map
    [Upon my forehead, my skin
    A projection of the dead[/quote]
    The poem was a smooth read all the way through, you really did a good job with this piece. Hope you continue to post more poetic gems

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    Hi how are you my fellow poet? I really like this piece. The imagery in this poem stood out especially in these lines


    The poem was a smooth read all the way through, you really did a good job with this piece. Hope you continue to post more poetic gems

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    Thanks so much for commenting Azekiel =) My writing has been slow recently due to lots of schoolwork and dance rehearsals but I'll sure be posting over here if I finish anything ^__^ Thanks again.


    Posted By ¤Me¤ | Feb 23, 2011
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    Right fucking on..Yeah, right on.

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    Thanks for commenting, GreaterValues =)


    Posted By ¤Me¤ | Feb 24, 2011
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Are you high?

    Anyway - howdy hi Liisi - I adore this piece of poetry you've shared with us. It's so perfectly melancholy. There's some really lovely internal rhyme going on:

    Anyway- a very nice write = makes for a wonderful read. Now question is - Are you the "me" in this piece who didn't get chosen? He must be a fool then :p


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Mar 8, 2011
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    Thanks for commenting Jacquii =) And this is not about any sort of... relationship not-choosing-me.. (if it were, she would be a fool, as men are a complete NO to me..) It was actually about my sister. And the "me" is me, hah... Confuzzling... Anyway, thanks again =) I'm glad to say that the situation has changed since I wrote this... ^__^


    Posted By ¤Me¤ | Mar 8, 2011
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    LOL - I almost started to say that "he or she would be a fool" but wasn't particularly feeling politically correct tehhehe - Anyway - it's all good and I'm certainly happy the situation has changed, because the tone of the poem is definitely melancholy and full of longing.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Mar 8, 2011
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