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Discussion in 'Miscellaneous' started by Eric, Apr 14, 2008.



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    In the silence
    after
    she lay upon a rock

    By the
    blue glass
    of a river

    She does not
    weep
    she makes no sound

    Just like that
    her innocence
    is gone

    No beauty
    no magic
    and surely no love

    Just gone
    like him
    after

    Not the way
    she imagined it
    to be

    A woman stands
    where once
    a girl lay

    Her innocence
    seeping down smooth
    thighs

    Without a sound
    she slips
    into the water

    To wash the last
    of her innocence
    away.


    Posted By Eric | Apr 14, 2008
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    Dear Eric,

    This is such a realistic penning of a young gal's poignant experience and my heart goes out to this girl in your poem. Wonder how many young girl's have that secret. You brought me into the poem and I can almost feel her sorrow, embarrassment, and perhaps not regretting either. My mind went into a a few different directions as to her feelings. Excellent!

    Kim :)

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