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    JONATHAN living not existing.

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    Stand afar
    cause I bite like a rabid dog,
    vilest of all creatures,
    howling, trashing on the brink of mortality.
    Look away now,avert your gaze
    from a sight far too shocking
    for your feeble, privileged mind.
    Look away now,avert your gaze
    for you behold one less than human
    drowned in the putrid slime of a life
    comfortably and fortunately unknown to you.


    Hands off
    lest you soil them on my oozing sores.
    Don't feed me morsels
    lest I snap at your manicured fingers,
    spurred on by by a maddening hunger.
    Say your pious prayers now,
    summon your sleeping Saints.
    Intercede for my death now
    lest I live only to know hate.
    Turn your back, walk away now,
    leave me far behind I'm less than human.
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    Posted By JONATHAN | Mar 1, 2013
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Whoa! "Insanity's Plea" hmmmm :wow:
    I know insanity. I'M insanity. And last time I checked - I had no oozing soars of any variety o_O LOL

    Kidding... But I'm not sure what I expected when seeing the title of this one JONATHAN -- But what you've described here sounds perfectly horrifying:

    These images are nightmarish. If only Insanity were my dog - I'd have gotten him that rabies shot. I digress LOL - But dude! If you set out to horrify with this piece ==> Congratulations! Well done :p

    J.
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    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Mar 1, 2013
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    WOW is right .... I am in awe Jonathan. Excellent write!
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    JONATHAN living not existing.

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    Thank you Ms J and Mysty.. I wrote this one during a tough phase of my life, The only way I can explain the inspiration for this piece is back then I was terrified and yet defiant of my life.


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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    I've written quite a few of these sorts of poems Jon. It's usually an exercise in therapeutic lol. All I can say is that I'm glad that dark time has passed.

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    Hi Jonathan
    This poem is very powerful. The words you chose are so strong sounding and used in the most antagonistic and cutting of ways. I liked this poem very much!

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    G'day Jonathon...
    Your poem certainly paints the sad state of society for an individual classed as 'different' but only wants the chance to fit in. The points you make are sharp and cutting. Enjoyed.
    Lindsay
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    JONATHAN living not existing.

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    Im glad you did and Im sorry it took me so long to reply however this poem was from long back and at that time I felt each word quite passionately though now I feel a bit disconnected from it. Its still mine tho so I appreciate the positive feedback.. Jonathan


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