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    Sally Roberts Forestdawn

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    It all started with a packet of seeds
    To be planted with tenderness and care
    At the base of an Oak, free from all weeds.
    They will produce such beauty and flare.

    To be planted with tenderness and care,
    A cacophony of colorful flowers,
    They will produce such beauty and flare
    With an aroma that continue for hours.

    A cacophony of colorful flowers,
    Bright oranges, with yellows and reds,
    With an aroma that can continue for hours,
    Delivered from their fresh flowerbeds.

    Bright oranges, with yellows and reds,
    At the base of an Oak, free from all weeds,
    Delivered from their fresh flower beds
    It all started with a packet of seeds.

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    PaintedDiary JPiC Mentor

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    Dear Forestdawn (I love your name),
    This is yet another refreshing, aestheic, feel good poem. As a teacher, from time to time we need to read poems like this, you know what I mean. (I teach 8 - 12th grade Sciences) Your word choice was so careful, and perfect, yet flows like mountain spring water. I can see right now, that we are in for a treat, with your "naturesque", if you will, poetry. Thank you for sharing. Loved it!

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    Sally Roberts Forestdawn

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    Thank you very much Kim...PaintedDiary.. :)

    Your comment was beautiful. Wow a teacher huh? I am a homeschool teacher myself for my eight year old daughter. It`s a challenge I can say that. But I enjoy it a lot!

    Thanks again for your reply. It was greatly appreciated.

    Blessings
    Forestdawn
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Hi FORESTDAWN - This piece sounded so familiar to me... I first thought it was some eloquent style that I had seen while doing research several years back - So I did my google thing LOL

    It's a very lovely example of a PANTOUM - I've read it before!!!!! On ShadowPoetry :yes: Seems a small world huh LOL

    Anyway - beautiful writing - I really enjoyed this piece immensely, as it reminds me of Tennessee... Beautiful state if I may say so myself - My hometown: Oak Ridge..... So you can see I have a fondness for the Oak - Also nature in general really.

    But your words are all so picturesque - It's like I can see 'clarity' in your writing - You've written a very beautiful ode to nature - I like!

    Thanx for sharing!

    Jacquii.


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    Sally Roberts Forestdawn

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    how observant you are!

    Greetings Jacquii:
    Thank you for you comment. Wow! you are correct. small world indeed. Yes! You did read this poem on Shadow Poetry!! I`m still with Shadow Poetry. but I thought I would share my work with a new group as well. I`m sure as time goes on, Jacquii, you`ll probably remember many of ,my poems, as I post them.
    Thanks again. I am very happy to have joined this community of writers. Thanks for alowing me to be apart of this awesome group.

    Blessings
    Sally aka Forestdawn

    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    great poem Sally,
    really fresh and lovely
    as nature poems should be,
    I'm glad I read this

    Sally Roberts Forestdawn

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    Thanks erik.

    Your words are a joy to my heart.

    Blessings

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