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    Mr. Monster Just some dude.

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    Sometimes when you're sleeping,
    you whimper and moan.
    You cry softly in terror,
    you think you're alone.

    But I'm here beside you,
    here from the shadows,
    to cradle and shield you,
    from the highs and the lows.

    I watch from your windows,
    your locks are a joke,
    anyone could get in here,
    and beat you 'till you broke.

    But that's not going to happen,
    I swear on my love.
    I'm going to protect you,
    push comes to shove.

    Your hair is so long now,
    your skin is so soft,
    and why were you out in the rain?
    Tomorrow you'll sniffle and cough.

    I say this in a whisper,
    while we're safe from the dawn,
    I'll always be with you,
    of me you'll never be gone.

    Always beside you,
    always in the dark,
    the filth you keep dating,
    buried face down in the park.

    But I'm not angry,
    I know you're so trusting,
    you couldn't suspect,
    not of their greed and their lustings.

    Soon you'll be stirring,
    your tears will have dried,
    I'll return to the night,
    the moon my disguise.

    But know that you're loved, dear,
    know that you're loved, dear.
    I'll always be watching,
    I'll always be here.

    Shh. Go to sleep now.




    Many thanks to Mr. Leonard Cohen, I finally got to writing this after listening to the awesomeness of

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    Oh, that's obnoxious. Sorry guys, I wanted it to be a nice, subtle link, but it automatically makes a big ol' huge youtube video. That's horrible.

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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    JPiC: Home of the Obnoxious Widescreen Vids...
    Actually - it's kind of interesting to see from whence you draw your inspiration...

    This poem is confusing me though. "It's Allright" -- but the love interest seems so far away, yet so close. It's perplexing. Almost a stalker-esque feel I got when reading it. Was this your intention?

    It's obvious there's a personal, emotional attachment. There's also the feeling of shadowed intimacy throughout. Reminds me of weird dream I had once: my soulmate beside me, yet I cannot see him. The feeling of love so abundant. I wanted to wakeup. The dream was truly odd. A kaleidescope of schizophrenia...

    Anyway - I'm rambling. Interesting write though = thanks for the share.

    J.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Aug 23, 2011
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    Mr. Monster Just some dude.

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    That was absolutely the intention. The way I see it, the only difference between love and stalking are if the feelings are returned or not.

    Plus, I'm a sucker for anything remotely creepy.
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    A thin line a lot of times to be sure.
    Funny - the video holder image ==> "Songs Of Love And Hate"
    Definitely a thin line. But now I'm wondering if this poem is based on real experience....perhaps your own experience.....Is the one being showered with such enamored attention loving you back......?


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