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    Fug-azi New Member

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    sunbathing wet stones
    beneath waterfalls cascade:
    dog with cocked leg



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    A 5-7-5 Haiku


    Posted By Fug-azi | Apr 11, 2008
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    Anonymous Encounter New Member

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    hello

    is there more to your post? or was it meant to be short? it flows well i was just wondering.
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    Dear Thea ...... this is a Haiku .... a short form of Japanese Poetry about nature. It is a 3 line with a count of 5 syllables on the first line, 7 syllables on the 2nd line and 5 syllables on the 3rd line. Each line should be able to be a stand alone picture and each line together with each other a whole new picture. This is how a typical original Haiku is written.

    But in todays world of poetry a Haiku is not necessarily the 5-7-5 combination anymore. But it still has to be a short three lined poem with each line being able to evoke a mental picture on it's own and another altogether.

    Another similar form is the Senryu .... it's standard original is also a 5-7-5 syllable count. But with Senryu you are using emotion. I hope this explanation helps.

    I do have to say Colin.... quite the Haiku you have written lol... Excellent effort.


    Posted By Mysty | Apr 12, 2008
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    butchiesmom JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Colin, love the haiku! sunbathing rocks, waterfall and dog lifting its leg. Got me! Hysterical!

    hugs,
    Gail

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    thank you, i don't know many differant forms. maybe i will try one of these. :)
    is this the right way to reply? hope so!
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    Dear Colin,

    This is fantabulous! Thank you for posting this. The Haiku was beautiful really! Loved it!

    Painted :)

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    Nice, very nice, beautiful words


    Posted By Eric | Apr 14, 2008
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