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    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    JESTER OF HEARTS ~ SONNET

    With half a smile smirks the jester of hearts
    aiming for broken hearts deceived in hell.
    The clubs and spades and diamonds, not her arts
    but playing the game of hearts suits her well.

    She's clever in her costume aiming wand
    at down, unlucky clown with eyes of brown
    who in the name of love has just been conned.
    What attracted her was his downcast frown.

    Bedecked in hearts and tattered wings of red
    the jester proudly holds her souvenir.
    Heart of fool still beating grossly undead
    on tip of magic wand beats bloody fear.

    The jester queen of hearts and trickery
    gloats on her heart throne in sheer victory.

    © July 10, 2007 Karen Davies


    Posted By Moonchild | Feb 5, 2008
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    Terence Member

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    Good sonnet, Moonchild. Close to IP, even WS wasn't perfect, but it flows well, has perfect rhyme and is appropriate to the season.

    Delightful, Terence


    Posted By Terence | Feb 5, 2008
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    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    Yes Terrance this is not one of my better Sonnets.
    It is not quite IP like you said but close.
    Anyway thanks for not picking on me too much(hugs)
    Glad you liked!:wub:


    Posted By Moonchild | Feb 6, 2008
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    solo New Member

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    yep i see that too ...not quite iambic pentameter
    ....sonnets are very difficult to write...I've tried and never quite got it


    nevertheless as some-one i know once said...you can try to write a sonnet...fail...and end up with a magnificent poem any way....i did enjoy this...it was interesting:)


    Posted By solo | Feb 10, 2008
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    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    Thank you Solo.
    I have plenty of Sonnets though that do have IP.
    This just didn't turn out quite right for some reason.
    Glad ya liked :)


    Posted By Moonchild | Feb 10, 2008
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