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    Curtis Spider Lee Curtis Spider Lee

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    All that I see.
    Won't play with toys.
    She says no to the boys.
    She once was a part of me.
    I knew that someday that flower would bloom.
    Now I'm counting her steps till graduation in June.
    So gone are the days she would be sent to her room.
    Baby dolls sit in line, still awaiting tea.
    The zoo survived the toy lion in a cage, still can't get free.
    Puppets on strings.
    I recall a time when Pinocchio lied to us....to me.
    All that I can see.
    Was her then and now she runs with her friends.
    Yes, all day long she runs for miles.
    Her and her juvenile baby dolls.
    O never mind, I can't get mad though.
    Growing up is what I'd hoped for.
    Just then, she told me"Daddy I Love You."
    As she walked out the door-
    I knew then she would always be a part of me.
    Leaving me with that lying-ass Pinocchio.

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    PaintedDiary JPiC Mentor

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    Hey lil' brother,

    This is an incredible write....so much love in this...we have had many conversations...yes. The title captured my attention and is most fitting. I absolutely LOVE this, going into my favorites, excellent rating, and made me a little misty. A Daddy's love for their child / children is radiant through out and beckons to be read and heard. You penned this beautifully and flawlessly. Love ya'.

    Kim :giftrose:

    Curtis Spider Lee Curtis Spider Lee

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    Yes Big Sister we have had a many of conversation. I share this one with all the fathers out there who are truly there for there children. As I am for my little lady Jacquetta.
    Too many fathers are getting bad raps, there are still some real dads out here. Right Zaac! Thank you Big sister for reading, your kind remarks and rating this work! Much love for ya too!

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    the last line is a killer lol. i like this a lot. and it reminds me of her cuz she is all girly girl and on the go already and she's only 6. thanks spider

    zaac


    Posted By zaac | Apr 10, 2008
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    Mysty JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Spider this is truly beautiful. Sighs they just seem to grow up too fast. It is easier for men because as they age.... they only get more distinguished.... And we women just get old lol. I think I am aging like fine wine.... mellowing ..... becoming oh damn ...inspiration strikes... Thank You :D

    Love

    Mysty


    Posted By Mysty | Apr 11, 2008
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    Curtis Spider Lee Curtis Spider Lee

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    Thank Zaac for your kind reply. I had you and your little lady in mind when I wrote this one! I'm pleased that you enjoyed it and I thank you for reading and your comment on this write!

    Curtis Spider Lee Curtis Spider Lee

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    I Thank You for your comment on this write Mysty! LOL!! I love it LOL!! I'm quite sure you're still drop-dead gorgeous Mysty. "I feel you... all down your back and spine" As for me on the other hand... I may well appear to be all tore-up and well taken by wear and tear. Maybe my buddy Zaac can take me around back of the JPIC, to the back 40 and take me out of my melancholy looks!
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Ha!

    That's a quote for all ages LOL - I liked this poem - there's some exquisite imagery in this one - And a lot of emotion went into making this piece - It seems like it really:

    Yep - a lot of emotion - and some interestingly abstract imagery evolved from the drama so it seems LOL - A very nice write - something I can surely relate to: Getting away from that lying ass ho - better known as wooden nosed bastard Pinocchio :LOL:

    Thanx for the share and the smile.

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Apr 14, 2008
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    This is great Spider Lee. Yeah, I'd like to take that Pinocchio’s head and use it for kindling.


    Posted By JolieH | Apr 16, 2008
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