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    JolieH JPiC Contributor

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    This morning is sadness
    words I discover
    leave me a lonely bluebird
    in ruins of an ancient bird bath,
    pecking residue of crusted moss.
    Where is the life in this lost tale?
    Skeletons of horses, a rotted pumpkin
    wait to escort Cinderella
    in aftermath of holy war.
    I should have been here yesterday
    when statues of cherubs
    pissed fountains of fresh water.
    I could have drank from
    the silver cup,
    worn silk ribbons in my hair.
    What's left, but I'm sorry.
    They didn't like you.
    You weren't chosen
    to light a prince's eye.
    You were a mistake they tried to erase.
    You came too late.
    You'll just have to accept,
    you were nothing but a stupid girl
    that didn't understand.
    Fly away bluebird.
    There's nothing for you here
    just bones of a dead dream.


    Posted By JolieH | May 13, 2008
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    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    This is interesting and intriguing.
    Lots of great lines and images.
    Enjoyed a bunch and I really like it.
    Great job Jolie!


    Posted By Moonchild | May 13, 2008
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    butchiesmom JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Such a sad statement! Makes me want to cry!

    Sad but hauntingly beautiful poem, JolieH.
    Gail

    Tha-Emissary Black Knight!

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    When it all goes down!

    Mmm this is raw! Talk about not happily everafter this is it. I think this line, "in ruins of an ancient bird bath" sounds like soap scum! Very great descriptions JolieH!

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    A sad and haunting poem Jolie almost made me cry but so many truths written into your poem that it is beautifully written bravo
    hugs kisses
    tom


    Posted By Bear | May 22, 2008
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