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  1. Malnourished

    Ariono-jovan Labu Member

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    Nested on a milk crate
    corner
    Fillmore & Fulton in front
    the local Arabian liquor bank
    black boy thin as a skeleton,
    ragged yellow- lime green T- shirt
    quilted & patched homemade jeans
    & cardboard sneakers
    dark as a summer- noon shadow
    eyes of sulfur
    afro like taco meat
    silently sings a blank anthem
    of poverty
    while fumbling his chopstick
    ashy white fingers. Maybe he
    was wondering what it be like to
    partake a four-course meal,
    pondering what bus- bunker/ alley
    he’d share in the chilled night,
    if there was an ounce of luv
    & pity peoples living in the City
    or if the next life he might
    be blessed to unzip himself
    from his tar colored skin.

    Yet i do know
    he wasn’t thinking nothing
    'bout conquring Iraq, the latest presidential ratings
    “Red Alerts” from prophetic terrorist attacks.
    Wasn’t thinking nada the latest
    bubble- gum R&B radio hit
    protesters boycotting global warming
    or if it rains diamonds on Neptune.
    His world conceived a degree
    below sin, some blasphemous curse
    as if a genetic freak
    more alienated from
    God than
    Frankenstein.

    Amzy A friend, Well met.

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    Powerful imagery here, though I am concerned that this black boy has white fingers...
    This feels like a black and white picture, showing the scene you described, sprawled out alongside an article on the plight of a nation in Time magazine. Excellent work.


    Posted By Amzy | Aug 28, 2006
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    Jeez Banned

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    Hi Labu,


    You have written a
    great story here and
    most would view it as
    it's a sin on that male
    child to be where he is,
    and in the time of the
    Iraq fighting.

    Still, it only proves that
    males conjour up violence
    that involves others that
    have nothing to do with
    their petty greeds.

    Thanks for the read.


    Posted By Jeez | Aug 28, 2006
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    Terry New Member

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    This is an amazing write..the imagery just awesome.
    Very well done.


    Posted By Terry | Aug 28, 2006
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  2. Artistic

    PaintedDiary JPiC Mentor

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    Dear Ariono,
    What can I say brother. The imagery you have painted on this canvas was powerful, poignant, and political. One could feel , what he was feeling....it read like the little boy could have been you. Please share your inspiration for this amazing piece. Am grateful to have you as my mentor, and we finish our collaboration soon. Much Luv Ariono.

    Kimberly
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    OK ARIONO - wow! I'm continually amazed with your ability to create such a "touchable" reality - Your words literally paint... I actually felt like touching my hair after reading the "afro like taco meat" line - such is your skill dude!

    The very last part of the last stanza:

    Just simply amazing... I can actually feel you talking about me in this poem LOL - That's what good poetry does: makes you feel like it's you - the story - the essense - the "meat" is familiar.

    Nice one! AWESOME write - Thanx for sharing it!

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Oct 2, 2006
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    Benny New Member

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    Powerful...just powerful. Ain't art beautiful when presented properly? Yeah.


    Posted By Benny | Oct 22, 2006
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