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  1. Depressed

    butchiesmom JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Looking up through the darkness,
    the sun shines in clear skies.
    Reaching for its healing light,
    I slide back to the bottom.

    Sitting here in the darkness,
    tears and sadness prevail.
    Crying here at the bottom,
    its echoes thought unheeded.

    Living in the darkness,
    the light beckons me.
    Climbing rung after rung,
    reaching out for help.

    Cries in the darkness heeded,
    friends waited with understanding.
    To make my way out of darkness,
    I had to climb out myself.


    Posted By butchiesmom | Nov 6, 2006
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    I like that :coolgum:


    Posted By birdie | Nov 7, 2006
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    WOW! - "Times like these that try mens' hearts..." - quote comes to mind when reading your poem.

    Hey BUTCHIESMOM - This poem really reads well - the repetition "...darkness..." works just beautifully... It's such a dark poem, but in such times I like to think that there indeed is a light at the end... (((I know! Dreadful cliche)))

    At anyrate - you approach the subject matter with originality - Your poem speaks of strength AND I like that.

    Thanx for sharing,

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Nov 7, 2006
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    Totally AWESOME!


    Posted By lanaia74 | Nov 7, 2006
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  3. Depressed

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    Thank you all for your kind comments! It's my view of coming back from deep depression.
    Gail


    Posted By butchiesmom | Nov 7, 2006
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    NeyNey What If...

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    And what a view it is.
    Very inspiring...and very strong in emotion.
    Good job.


    Posted By NeyNey | Nov 7, 2006
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    Echoes Poetic Princess

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    vivid imagery in this write, well-expressed:bravo:


    Posted By Echoes | Nov 9, 2006
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  4. Depressed

    butchiesmom JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Thank you, neyney and echoes! I appreciate your comments.
    Gail


    Posted By butchiesmom | Nov 9, 2006
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    Inspiring,
    Creative,
    Well...........spoken from the heart to the mind. :rightthere:


    Posted By Abae | Nov 9, 2006
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  5. Artistic

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    Dear Butchiesmom,

    Wow!!!!! This is the first poem of yours that I read, and such an amazing read it was. One could actually feel the journey, the darkness, and the craving to be free. This was excellent. The culmination at the end was very profound! This came from way down deep of the abyss of your being, and expressed ever so eloquently.

    To make my way out of darkness,
    I had to climb out myself
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    Ooohhhhh how wonderfully executed this is. I am on the lookout for more from you. Bravo dear poet, Bravo!!

    Painted
  6. Depressed

    butchiesmom JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    You've brought tears to the eyes of this poet! I don't think I've had such praise for anything that I've written.
    You saw where it came from and where it ended. Yes, it came from a very deep abyss within my soul. So deep, I lost the very voice which helped me vocalize the pain within. Voices within tortured me for a few years, yet, when they silenced the voices, they also silenced the one I depended on the most.
    It was when I was diagnosed with Parkinson's Disease, everything held within came flooding out with my voice floating on top, lol. I have a poem about it, but haven't put it anywhere in a long time because of the pain it could cause others (and because it could really use some editing, lol). It was the first poem I'd written in over 30 years and the first thing I'd written in almost 10 years.
    Someone who's never been through it, doesn't understand how deep depression can take you. It took a long time for me to climb to the top.
    Oops, I get a bit long-winded at times, lol.
    What I meant to say was "Thank you for the moving review of the poem I most identify with."
    hugs,
    Gail

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    great poem i can understand how you felt through this poem because i have felt that way too, but we are strong and we will stay where there is light its a good poem


    Posted By pumpkin05 | Dec 12, 2006
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  7. Depressed

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    We are survivors, daughter.
    Mom

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