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Discussion in 'Emotional Romantic' started by Sartor, Feb 16, 2007.



    Sartor JPiC Contributor

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    LIPS
    ~o~
    Warm lips that form a perfect cupid's bow,
    that hold the morning sun within their smile.
    Lips whispering to me in darkness low
    and linger on my cheek the briefest while.
    ~o~
    Pale lips that bring forth words from heav'n and hell,
    that fills my heart with joys and with pains,
    that takes me to the clouds where angels dwell
    and curl around my heart like iron chains.
    ~o~
    Cold lips from which the words of anger float,
    then quiver with the thought of what they said.
    Those cold harsh words that formed within your throat,
    cold words once spoken can not be unsaid.
    ~o~
    Hot lips that drip with passion of the night,
    that begs for usage in the darkened room ,
    that whisper to me ere the moon takes flight
    and offer me their sweetness to consume.
    ~o~
    Red lips like petals of the passion flower,
    that part to breathe the honeyed breath of love.
    Those lips that my lips gladly would devour,
    whose honey I would taste again thereof.
    ~o~
    Sweet lips that greet me with a loving smile.
    Lips brushing mine with gentle sweet caress.
    Those lips that frame the brilliance of your smile.
    Those lips that to me ever more impress.
    ~o~

    Sartor


    Posted By Sartor | Feb 16, 2007
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    this is pretty awesome. only thing i didnt like was the word usage in the fourth stanza. but hey what do i know...take it or leave it.

    zaac


    Posted By zaac | Feb 16, 2007
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    Sartor JPiC Contributor

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    Zaac......I am sorry you did not enjoy the final stanza. Perhaps you would tell me why it did not agree with you.


    Posted By Sartor | Feb 17, 2007
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    no no no, dont misunderstand lol. i should have looked closer at my grammar. the last stanza was fine...i just thought the word "usage" was kind of awkward. sorry bout that.

    zaac


    Posted By zaac | Feb 17, 2007
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    Sartor JPiC Contributor

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    Zaac.......My error.....you did say forth in your original reply. Somehow I had the impression you were talking about the last stanza. The word seemed to fit the circumstances at the time I wrote the poem. Thanks for your reply.


    Posted By Sartor | Feb 18, 2007
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    WOW this poem was so beautiful i loved this stanza

    Warm lips that form a perfect cupid's bow,
    that hold the morning sun within their smile.
    Lips whispering to me in darkness low
    and linger on my cheek the briefest while.

    it was so lovely thank you for sharing with us :)

    Sartor JPiC Contributor

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    Jasmine........thanks for commenting.


    Posted By Sartor | Feb 19, 2007
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