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    Pre-Post: I know I have been posting a lot of my own work, but haven't been commenting much on others.. I'm reading a lot of it, I promise, I just never have anything witty or interesting enough to reply on..


    Living Machine
    By L. E. Evenston

    Machine,
    Living Machine.
    Destruction and decay;
    Wraped around the central mindset.
    Struggle.

    Struggle,
    Living struggle.
    Can't get out of this place.
    Needing the daylight to save me from
    Darkness.

    Darkness,
    Living Darkness
    Working into my soul,
    Not allowing me to live in
    My life.

    My life,
    Living my life
    is harder than it looks
    with persistant trouble from Leader;
    Machine.

    Machine,
    Living Machine.
    Destruction and decay;
    Pulling at the central mindset
    Today.



    And as a bonus, here's a little poem entitled "The Epic" (You'll see why it doesn't have its own thread)

    The Epic
    by L. E. Evenston

    The Epic
    The End


    (No, I wont explain it. ;) Figure it out for yourself)

    mangodroplet Blue Mango Puppy :]

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    hmmm...interesting....
    nice machine poem.

    The Epic.........hmm..i had my own interpretation i told erik..i'll type it out later, gotta go..:D
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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Very nice Cinquains...and I love the repetition that flows to seamlessly from one to the next. Superb work, CW!!

    no comment on The "non" Epic...lol :smile-cheese:

    Nomad

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    Whee! Thank's you two! ^.^ Love yahs!

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