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Discussion in 'Emotional Romantic' started by Mr. Monster, Jan 17, 2007.



    Mr. Monster Just some dude.

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    I'll bet you sent saner men than me to madness,
    with the way that your hips move.
    Never knew that accordians could sound like Death,
    but on you their the tool of the
    Reaper.

    I'm sure that men of higher morals than myself
    become perverts with the way that your breasts sway.
    Your skin looks just like caramel,
    how fuckin' sweet that candy must
    taste.

    The way I love myself is exactly
    the way I wanna love you.
    Don't you know that every
    moment of sin could bring us closer to
    God?

    You don't even know the power you hold,
    darlin', the destruction you weave with that,
    brown eyed, innocent, Jezebel
    look, do you?

    but the Desert Eagle's flyin' steady,
    'cause it knows you're killing me.
    I can't even will myself to look your way,
    but I can't help but stare.

    I can imagine what you might have tasted like,
    and the pillow talk we'd have afterward.
    I can imagine bearing myself to the point of pain,
    and listening to your fears.
    I'd have loved to meet your parents,
    I'd anticipate our bitter fights,
    and making up for them when moonlight shone.

    And just 'cause I'm perverted don't mean
    I'm unfaithfull.
    Just 'cause I'm poor, don't mean
    I wouldn't spend what I got on you.

    But I knew that if I grew a spine,
    it'd just get stabbed inbetween your heels.
    'Cause you don't seem to fucking get it,
    I'm interested in so much more than your tits.
    I wanna know the mind that sits above them,
    I wanna know if it even exists.
    You bear yourself almost to nudity,
    yet a second glance reveals nothing beneath the flesh.
    I wish you'd realize that

    Every moment of sin could bring us closer to
    God.
    Come to me, girl, 'fore I love myself instead.
    We could-fuck! Nevermind now, it's too late. Goddamn, I just washed the jeans, too...wonder if the bus is comming tomorrow...

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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Hey MR MONSTER - I like this piece - It's "no-holds-barred" It's REAL!

    I liked that stanza especially, it lends a certain respect towards the one of your affection. Very interesting combination of words - makes for a good read.

    Anyway - Nice piece - I can definitely know the love that is espoused within your words. It's kinda like a beckoning of recognition, without all the blablabla...

    Nice share! Again Welcome to the Community!

    Jacquii.

    FYI - I do know the power :chuckle:


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Jan 18, 2007
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    Mr. Monster Just some dude.

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    Hey thanks. Yeah, I was over at a record store when I saw this chick dancing to the music. She wasn't even trying to seduce anyone, but she was all the same. Plus, I'm the bashful type. I'll more often just stare at you from a safe distance then actually walk up and try to make something happen, so...this poem is a product of that.

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    Most men have been caught in this one...understood these thoughts very well. Indeed, put right out there...but, it is truth. Great work. It was honest.


    Posted By Benny | Jan 20, 2007
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    I love the real, raw, approach to this piece. Very intriguing, and the word spin is fantabulous!!! It is as if the poem demands a standing ovation, and it does. Great Write Mister!!!

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