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    Jims Inn Jims Inn

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    i saw my love carried away on a cloud to the palace of the gods
    where the master of fate crowned her with a star
    and set her image among the heavens where
    chained to the sky her presence shadowed the very sun.
    bringer of light, confronted by her beauty even aphrodite,
    goddess of desire returned ashamed to olympus.

    she wept and tears of amber fell staining the ground where i stood,
    and i was angry when i found her stolen
    so i seduced a caste of priests with gold and
    married the moon to be near her
    from there i made my attack on heaven
    facing all the gods of terror, but not even death
    that dreaded divinity dared to stop me.

    finally i found my love and drove the spirits of the dead away
    from their funeral games and caught her in an invisible net
    with doors of brass where she renewed her virginity
    in the river of forgetfulness and had no sense of sin.
    hungering for travel we revolved in infinite and empty space
    served by priestesses who lit misleading fires and sang erotic poetry.

    thus we controlled the calender and to worship her
    i brought her a wreath of stardust.
    mystical bride of the gods, influenced by the love star venus
    and libra lying east of the scorpion
    who alone controls our destiny
    guide us as we make love for eternity.


    Posted By Jims Inn | Sep 4, 2007
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    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    Oh wow I really enjoyed and liked this one.
    Very imaginative and creative. I love mythology
    and this was great stuff! Very magical and spellbinding.
    Loved it :thankyou:


    Posted By Moonchild | Sep 5, 2007
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    Jims Inn Jims Inn

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    hi karen ... do forgive me for responding to your post so late ... first of all i was having virus problems so i had to install a new anti-virus defender ... then for some weird reason i couldn't get logged in but ...

    i am so happy to receive a critique ... i was beginning to think i was invisible ... don't know of this is sort of classified as bumping ... but "love trilogy... part one... fate was a daughter" is posted on the love forum ... why not have a read?

    luv ya!


    Posted By Jims Inn | Sep 5, 2007
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    beautiful penning Jim emotional powerful love and a very creative write
    handshakes
    bear


    Posted By Bear | Sep 6, 2007
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    Jims Inn Jims Inn

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    thanx so much for your kind words thomas ...

    do take a look ar part one which i posted on romantic poetry ... didn't really know my way around then ... it will put part two more into perspective ...


    Posted By Jims Inn | Sep 6, 2007
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