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    Margaret Rose.

    There was little time, even less warning,
    when an anger of ocean smashed
    her portside and in a blink
    the mother-of-all broke her like a stick,
    today she sits with her remainder of men,

    Currents sea-wind her beech decks
    and wave a sheaf of seaweed flags,
    a click of crabs entertain in her lower reaches
    stargazed by swords of fractured light
    ghosted through the blue-green,
    the night alone would close her soul and free
    a fleet of rainbowed life aswim between the ribs of men.

    She creaks and flexes, tied only by anchor in the undercurrent,
    twisting from stern to hull she moans as an old man
    while a wicked brine corrodes and preserves selectively,
    imprisoned from swell and tempered wave she rests,
    bit by bit returned to a collecting shore,
    a jigsaw of remains.


    Posted By saxonshadow | Oct 5, 2006
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    Dear Saxonshadow,

    I have always loved maritime poems and poems about the Ocean in general. I simply love the Ocean. I read this over, and over again. This poem speaks saline liquid power. I love the way you refer to the Ocean as the mother-of-all!! The word selection, images, work beautifully. I feel like this ship was in a movie, and I am one of the stage crew, right there!!!! Bravo Poet!!!!!

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    saxon, this was clever, I liked the mystery about it and the wording added more mystery, great work
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    This was more than clever. This was visualization made real. Powerful, wrenching for those that love the sea and its power.


    Posted By Sealiah | Oct 13, 2006
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    saxonshadow JPiC Contributor

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    Kind thanks, Kimberly, you are more than kind, this is my first attempt on this watery subject, thank you for reading and for such an encouraging reply, Sax.

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    A thousand thanks for reading, erikesabrook, and a thousand more for making me feel good about it, ty Sax.

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    Hi, Sea-liah, and thank you, she is indeed a powerful mother, ty Sax.

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    thanks for posting it sax cool name by the way, I accept your thanks and
    if it wasn't a good poem I wouldn't have responded that way really appreciated and enjoyed here sax

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