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    Sealiah Poetic Dancer

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    You had the Voice of an Angel
    When you were young and sweet
    They heard your voice and lulled you away
    Where diamonds glitter among the elite.

    One diamond is no different from another
    One diamond can be replaced.
    They smile, laugh, and dance tonight
    They dance and laugh your life away.

    You never should have left our Home
    You never should have gone to stay
    For now your smile is just a mask
    The laughter has now gone away.

    The Angel's Voice is tired and broken
    The Angel's laugh is gone.
    You never should have trusted them my sweet
    Come home and rest in the sun.


    Posted By Sealiah | May 1, 2008
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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Hey Sealiah...where u been off to? Missed you! How's the little one doing?

    Very nice write…heartbreaking emotion layered with sadness and regret.

    Nomad

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    Kinda sad but beautifully expressed.
    Love your ending! This is a very good write
    and has good structure and meter. Well done, enjoyed :)


    Posted By Moonchild | May 20, 2008
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    emotiomal heartbreaking poem SEALIAH wonderfully written but also very sad
    hugs kisses
    tom


    Posted By Bear | May 22, 2008
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    Rest in the sun. I think I want to do that. but I got a feeling the global warming if gonna global fry me. So I'll pass. I like the wording it's almost gives me a feeling of watching the City of Angels. Maybe that's what you're hinting at with the last lines. You have a spectacular style!

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