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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Hey YAWL - this poem was in response to GRUMPS' Challenge #9 in the Creativity Outlet - It was quite fun composing this one - And I invite others to try the other challenges/exercises posted in the CO, as well as this one ;)

    Challenge words:
    amuse kinetic quill sophisticated grouse
    unkind feverish railroad comfort quality
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    Memories of Sophistocated Lady

    Amused am I when the feverish grouse
    smiles, tips hat, winks and bows
    To the quality of my unkind joie d' vivre,
    My sublime wobble-like-it's-hot-ness,
    My poetic, kinetic and unsympathetic
    hip-sway.

    Yeah... sometimes I sway sweetly, singin',
    lingering soft melody behind like stormy Monday's.
    Only with quill in hand. Sophistocated ink-dippin.
    Duke Ellington wrote a song for me. One day
    I'll write back.

    Perhaps when the railroad stops workin',
    For I've no need of the caravan here.



    Copyright © 2007 Jacquii Cooke


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Mar 21, 2007
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    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    a sophistictaed poem,
    it almost as if the character were laughing pompously slightly
    very well done
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    LOL - Thanx ERIK - the character is me AND you know better to think that I'm pompous :glare:

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Mar 22, 2007
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    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    uh sory msJ maybe I was confusingmy pompous laugh with that of a sophistictaed lady,
    uh that doesn't get me outta the sewer with ya I hope:drinks:
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    Dear Ms Jacquii,

    I tried to quote a favorite, and could not at all. This is HOT!!!! I read it OUT LOUD several times, and my foot a' tappin!! Would love to be out on the town with my sweetie, and stop in a club and hear this "Swag Poesy". This is fierce girl, and ya know it! I felt that Lady Day, Langston Hughes, Ella, Hampton, and Maya Angelou in this. Makes one move to the rhythym also. Watch out, may get a citation for that wobble-like-it's-hot-ness, hip-swayin'!!I give it a Mayalicious rating and a 5 PD rating!!!! LOL Loved it Girl!!!!! Wooohooooo!! Makes me want to pick up my pen, and swag!!

    {{{~~**KIM**~~}}};)2
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    I really like this one Ms Jacquii. You incorporated all those words so wonderfully.. Puts to shame the one I was thinking of lol..

    Mysty


    Posted By Mysty | Mar 22, 2007
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    Hi Mysty...great to see you!!! Well, Ms Jacquii, put me to shame so bad, I did not even finish the thought of mine....:bowing::poof-gone: lol

    Again Ms Jacquii...this is truly a work that needs to be published, please think about dusting off your manuscript, please?

    {{{~~**KIM**~~}}}:friends:
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Nope - Nope it sure doesn't :p LOL
    Thanx for your commentary though ERIK - really appreciate it!

    WHOA! Gotta love the 5 PD rating! :yay: - Thanx KIM - I was going for something kinda sophistocated, but kinda loose and freeing at the same time - Glad you like this one - And to be compared to the greats like Hughes & ELLA = :wow: Thanx so much ;)

    OMG MYSTY - haven't seen you in a minute & 1/2 - Glad to see you online - but PLEASE post your poem as well - Good God - That's what JPiC is about - is seeing the beautiful styles of our Fellow Poets & Poetesses :yes: --- At anyrate - thanx very much for your comment ;)

    And MS KIM - Ditto!
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    Thanx for the comments YAWL = Very much appreciated!

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Mar 23, 2007
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    Ms. J...I LOVE it when you write in the challenges...you up the ante every time!! This is such a mind teaser...Duke Ellington thrown in there instantly transports me to a slightly dimmed club, a jazz piano player in the corner of the stage as a backdrop to the scene of the diners swaying to the hot beat that sinks down into the gut.

    :yay:

    Nomad
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    LOL - Thanx MS N - don't know about upping the ante though :p
    I'm glad you enjoyed this poem though - I tried to be loose with it and have a little. ;)

    Thanx for your commentary ;)

    Jacquii.

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    Interesting and technically innovative.

    I like the natural tone.

    Many thanks.
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Wow NIKOS - so glad you enjoyed this one - And thanx very much for compliment on this piece. Means a lot from such a talented poet as yourself ;)

    Jacquii.

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    This really is quite good, funny and most entertaining, I really must attempt one of these challenges, looks like they are more fun than one might think,

    ps. 'wobble-like-it's-hot-ness' really made me smile, ty for that... BG
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Ah! Hi SAXON - Yes the challenges are really LOTS of fun - It's simply amazing to see the different styles just a few words can elicit from the Poet!

    I thank you very much for your comment on this piece. I'm glad you saw the humor in it LOL - I was going for a bit of tongue-in-cheek humor --- the sophistocated kind of course ;) --- I'm glad ya like it

    And yes - please do try the challenges - They really do help break the monotony of writers block and allows for a great creativity within the Poet/Writer - I think you'll enjoy!

    Jacquii.

    ps - AWESOME signature - Very nice quote :yes3:

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