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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Memories of Vietnam


    Beauty rises
    shimmering
    under full moon
    gliding softly
    home
    to rest
    upon your stature.
    Gunboats rage
    around
    you softly feed
    cold hard death
    through the machine
    spattering the lovely night
    with never ending screams
    bodies injected
    pierced by love
    of country
    fall to darkness
    enveloping arms
    of
    silver tipped waves
    flow red
    under a forlorn moon.
    Movement
    down the river
    dense forest
    to your left
    sharp stern profile
    painted black
    dripping with sweat
    no time for regret
    no time to think
    no time to feel
    no time to be
    who you were
    only
    who
    you have become
    the Grim
    tonight.

    © nomadicrhymer

    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    this was a very cool poem, you put yourself in that place quite good,
    parts were just right when you talk about the blodshed its mixture of enjoyment and transformation, you made it just go very smooth
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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Thanks for stopping in and reading Erik. I appreciate the comments. :kiss3:

    Nomad
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    Dear Nomad,

    This was intense. So full of power, strength, machine-gun executed, sadness, my God, I thought I was there. Loved the selection of words------>Masterful. You are scribing such a tough subject beautifully. I did not even blink. I am awe-struck and am on the look out for more. Your muse is full steam ahead and this along with "She Wrote" are brilliant!

    Kim
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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    PD...:air_kiss: it's really awesome when your vision is painted on to the canvas of the reader and absorbed exactly the way you portrayed it...that's exactly what I feel when I read your comments...thanks so much for stopping by to read this one.

    Nomad
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Oh My! MS THERESE this poem is so vivid with imagery - I thought that we'd be passed the memories of Vietnam - It was before my time actually - born in 1975 - it would be lovely to shed those horrid memories - but I suppose life just won't allow for that.

    What's even more is that people have equated the "disturbance" of Iraq to Vietnam... Isn't it so lovely to live in a world where the "most treacherous" war of this time would only allow for a 'handful' of American deaths as opposed to the fistfuls that Vietnam left in its horrible wake - like a hurricane of uber-Katrina fame?

    Now I wanted to cut that quote a little short, as I'm a firm believer that LOVE itself WILL NEVER cause pain - It's the PEOPLE who have given 'love' a bad name that causes that pain. Me? I would rather the heaven that so many people purport to believe in.

    Interesting poem MS N - Thanx for the share!

    Jacquii.


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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Thanks for stopping by Ms. J...it's always wonderful being reviewed by you...because you always place an interesting spin on the wording, and see things deep in the belly of the poem.

    I do agree with you about love...but I have to keep it in it's context...

    "pierced by love
    OF country"

    which is an "artistic expression" since I do believe that people were being drafted back then. Not sure any love was involved there.

    Vietnam...well, the name came after the poem...I wrote it without thinking of any particular war, and rather than leave it without a name...I thought that it actually fit the war of that time...sorry if it brings back bad memories for anyone.

    Nomad

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    Therese,

    I am a Viet Nam veteran..I served two tours in Viet Nam...I fell in love in Viet Nam...I saw the eyes of those who enjoyed the freedom our soldiers died for and I have a son that is somewhere in this world who may never meet me because of the shameful way our country abandon a conflict for the sake of bad press. The violent death of South Viet Nam...the torture and the killing fields. War will never be a pleasant thing, can't be because people die But as you and I both know, the greatest war in eternity was only won because a man would lay His life down for another..and so war the greatest sacrifice is to know the freedom one has and be willing to die to defend it.

    Thanks for this incredible poem and for every word you so carefully place to give us the pleasure to read it and absorb its message.

    Jerry
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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Jer...I am overwhelmed with happiness that you made it back from such a horrible experience to be with us today...when I know that so many did not. I appreciate your review of this poem greatly, all the more because you personally lived the words which I wrote. Kudos to you Jerry, and to all those who came back with you! Thanks for the wonderful comments, Jer. God Bless!

    Nomad
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    :wow: --- bad press? Interesting really - I thought I was the only one who had similar feelings...
    Sorry to hear about your son JER - maybe perhaps the stars have a reunion of sorts in mind.

    LOL - you do know I have a way with words - And yes - I know what you meant - I just thought to comment in my own special way about how your wording affected me. Yes indeed - artistic expression - love OF country is something else - I once wrote a mini poem:

    Patriotism: Jazz has nothing on the red,
    white & blue of rock-n-roll -
    yet I would live.

    Nationalism: Nothing has anything on the red,
    white & blue of rock-n-roll and jazz
    and the blues dare not interfere -
    yet I would kill.

    At anyrate - a thoroughly enjoyable piece!
    Thanx again for the sharing!

    Jacquii.
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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    I once wrote a mini poem:

    Patriotism: Jazz has nothing on the red,
    white & blue of rock-n-roll -
    yet I would live.

    Nationalism: Nothing has anything on the red,
    white & blue of rock-n-roll and jazz
    and the blues dare not interfere -
    yet I would kill.

    Jacquii.[/QUOTE]

    No clue how I missed this little jewel...lol! :notworthy: :girllove:

    Nomad:violin:

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