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    latishaslove New Member

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    Metamorphosis

    What’s this feeling taking over me?
    What’s this feeling in the depths of my body?
    Something’s different, it’s not the same
    I can hear him calling,calling my name
    Who or what is this calling to me?

    Why is it so dark, too dark to see?
    I long to feel the wind blowing in my
    hair
    I long to dive in the ocean over there
    I long to smell the flowers and climb the highest
    tree

    What is this feeling coming over me?
    Things are changing, it’s not the same
    I can hear him shouting, screaming my name

    Where is the girl I use to be?
    Where is that girl, where is she?
    Why is it so dark, so dark inside?

    Stop, Listen
    I hear him
    I open my eyes

    My love, my precious angel
    He calls to me
    My goddess, my queen, my Caribbean beauty
    I open my eyes
    I step out of my cocoon
    And I fly

    Author Latisha J Greaves-Barker

    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    I didn't like your other two poems, I'm just being honest, but I found this more on the right track,

    it brought the reader along to see what there was too see

    latishaslove New Member

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    Well

    Thank you for your expressed appreciation for at least one of my poems. That's one of my favorite things about art, there is lots of room for all types of styles and the artist is free the express himself genuinely. Those two poems you didn't like are among my favorites, because I took real experiences in my life and transformed them into beautiful works of art, that are reflections of me. Anyway thanks again.

    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    hey Latisha and by not liking them I must insist a lack of understanding on my part,
    its not my place to doubt or dislike any part of you, and certainly I don't,

    and I've been battered by editors myself so what I like isn't the law,

    so keep it on girl thats fabulous

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    At first I thought it was a religious calling... and then the final verse just made me realize something else... the beauty that is set free!
    Like this poem. I'm sure most people can relate to this metamorphosis!
    Cheers! :grouphug:


    Posted By ctivnan | Nov 8, 2007
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    latishaslove New Member

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    Glad you like it. Actually when I wrote this I had three things in mind, one, I was looking down at my tummy and thinking about this new person who is about to come into my life (my first born-I wrote it while I was pregnant), secondly how I was becoming a different person and I am in this cocoon shaping into the woman I am about to become(Actually I think I'm still in the cocoon) and thirdly, I felt God was calling me to become the women he intended me to be, so it is spiritual and somewhat religous but it is open to interpretation.

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    this is refreshing...you kind of threw poetic caution to the wind and it worked

    zaac


    Posted By zaac | Nov 8, 2007
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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    This is indeed an awakening...VERY NICE! It surprised me because I almost expected it to take a dark twist near the middle...but for me it seemed to gravitate toward a lover who has brought out a "new" person from within you. Now that I see your explanation above I have a better understanding...this is a very special poem...5 star rating on this one! :yay:

    Nomad

    latishaslove New Member

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    Thank you. For your positive feedback, personally I believe when you put your work out there. It's audience should feel free to establish their own interpretation of your work. We all feel different kinds of connection to art. We might feel different emotions towards an painting to what the artist was feeling when he was painting it.

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