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Discussion in 'Creative Traditional' started by Mindings, Oct 4, 2006.



    Mindings New Member

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    Old Pa Deeder danced to his name,
    With old Mrs Hippy who figured his game;
    But she didn't care, she was carried away,
    By the current affairs and the time of the day.

    Old Pa Sole was all on his own
    Wrapped up in his thoughts, his bird had just flown
    Miss Takes caused him trouble, Miss Conduct did too
    And the Two Miss Demeanors had made him feel blue

    Copyright 2002: Philip G. Bell :man_in_love:


    Posted By Mindings | Oct 4, 2006
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    Dear Philip,

    Ohhhhh, I get it now!!! LOL!!! Had to read a few times, lol!!!

    Miss Takes caused him trouble, Miss Conduct did too
    And the Two Miss Demeanors had made him feel blue

    Ok, mistakes, misconduct, and misdemeanor, ooohhhh how clever, and entertaining! Very refreshing and left me with a smile, with the form, the story, and the style! Loved it!! Take Care.

    Painted Diary aka Kimberly :yes:

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    Always happy to raise a smile! Thanks

    Philip


    Posted By Mindings | Oct 5, 2006
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    LOL! Loved it! Mississippi was carried away by the current! LOL! I was carried away by the excellent rhythm of the piece, the rhymes and the great story-line. This was really a joy to read and I'm looking forward to more! TY for posting!


    Posted By Altree94 | Oct 8, 2006
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