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Discussion in 'Spoken Word & Freestyle' started by Jims Inn, Sep 21, 2007.



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    She's young … no not a child … yet not a woman
    with long sunbeam hair she refuses to tie back
    so that it clings to the corners of her mouth
    and her fringe bobs in time with the blinks
    of her long eyelashes and knowing it annoys me
    she gives a feminine flick of her head so that
    i get a brief aspect of outrageously blue eyes
    that melt my heart before being hidden again.

    She's so chuffed she doesn't suck her thumb now
    and her nails have grown for the first time on such
    long supple educated fingers that glide across her mobile
    seemingly without touching, yet within seconds
    she's smiling at an sms reply blinking back at her.

    She's young … squealing in delight: "higher … higher."
    as the park swing seems about to launch her into orbit
    away from me never to return again.
    she's woman … instructing me over her shoulder:
    "hold tight!" as she throws the snarling quad bike
    around a corner scaring me … but I hesitate
    unsure about where my hands should be.

    "Put your arms around my waist," she cries
    grabbing at my hand … "then you won't fall off."
    she's child … she's woman and when she calls
    my heart flips … and my spirit soars when I hear:
    "hi … just phoning to say I luv ya grandpa."


    Posted By Jims Inn | Sep 21, 2007
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    Aumakua Misunderstood

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    Awwwwwwwwwwwww i love this poem!! It's so cute :D The meaning and everything! Kinda makes ya wanna cry =''''[ (not sure why though o_O) Awsome job :)


    Posted By Aumakua | Sep 23, 2007
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    Jims Inn Jims Inn

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    hi riha ... so glad you found "my girl" cute and that it made ya wanna cry! guess you must be someone's grand daughter too ...

    luv ya!

    jim


    Posted By Jims Inn | Sep 23, 2007
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    Aumakua Misunderstood

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    Yayness ^^ To be honest though i saw it more as a father/daughter thing until the very end that it said "hi … just phoning to say I luv ya grandpa." then i realized it was from a grandfathers point of view. It made me think of my dad though o.o


    Posted By Aumakua | Sep 23, 2007
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    awwwwwww thats a beautiful and tearful tribute to your granddaughter they grow up fast down they congrats its simply beautiful Jim
    handshakes
    bear


    Posted By Bear | Sep 24, 2007
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    hi bear ... thanx very much for the kind words

    jim


    Posted By Jims Inn | Sep 24, 2007
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    Yes!!! Great work here. My grandchildren fill my heart with such joy...I found myself nodding my head along as I read this work...wonderfully put.


    Posted By Benny | Sep 24, 2007
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    Jims Inn Jims Inn

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    thanx so much benny ...

    jim


    Posted By Jims Inn | Sep 24, 2007
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