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    This form is attributed to Balint Balassi, a great Hungarian lyricist of the 1500's who wrote of love, religion and war.
    A Balassi stanza is 9 lines in length with a syllable count of: 6,6,7,6,6,7,6,6,7 and a rhyme scheme of: b,b,a,c,c,a,d,d,a.
    Here is my example, hope you enjoy!


    My Love is Round

    The one I love is round.
    He sings - a deep bass sound.
    His slightly scarred skin is taut.

    His voice booms loud and clear.
    I love to hold him near.
    When we play we both get hot!

    Sometimes he is restive.
    Together - we're festive!
    Best darn drum I ever bought!


    Posted By Altree94 | Aug 18, 2006
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    funny poem I mean this caught me off-guard, it was great

    Altree94 VIP Member

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    TY Erik!
    Though no one else has said so, I bet you were not the only one caught off guard by this!
    Thanks again for stopping to read and comment, much appreciated!


    Posted By Altree94 | Oct 3, 2006
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    Very nice Tree!! What the hint for me was the taut skin----I actually thought of a drum, then said naaaa!!!!! But it was!!!!! LOL!!! Nice imagery!

    PD

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    TY PD!
    That just shows you that you can't be wrong ALL of the time! LOL! Sometimes you just gotta trust your instincts.
    Thanks again!


    Posted By Altree94 | Oct 3, 2006
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    Ah Tree,

    Yes the drum, know it well:prankster: .


    Posted By Jeez | Oct 4, 2006
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    Altree94 VIP Member

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    LOL! Yep - it just keeps banging away! LOL!

    TY for reading!


    Posted By Altree94 | Oct 4, 2006
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    Hi Tree,
    great poem, with a nice playful tone and loads of laughs. You completely tricked me: I didn't realize you weren't talking about a real man until the last line, despite all the clues you dropped here and there.

    Michael


    Posted By mbironneau | Oct 4, 2006
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    Altree94 VIP Member

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    TY Michael! And after you realized it was a drum, did you go back and read it again to find the clues? LOL! This was just my sneaky way of getting people to read my stuff twice!
    Thanks again, I really appreciate the comments!


    Posted By Altree94 | Oct 4, 2006
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    Yep, I did re-read it. Twice. The first time through, I thought: "Hmmm...a drum. Now where did that come from?" I re-read it, and that time I realized you were serious about the drum and I kicked myself for not seeing it. Then I re-read it again to look for the clues, which were everywhere :killdie:


    Posted By mbironneau | Oct 5, 2006
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    LOL! Michael!
    I'm not the only sneaky poet at this site - so be on your guard and watch out for them! TY!


    Posted By Altree94 | Oct 6, 2006
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