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    Terence Member

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    As I walked the lonesome lane
    I came across a rose so red
    it was as if the crimson sky
    had opened wide and bled.

    Soft petals slightly parted by
    the warmth of morning rays;
    its edges curled in pleasing pout
    that set the world ablaze.

    Honey bees had come to court
    the sweetness of its heart
    and so I waited patiently,
    until they would depart.

    I plucked that rose from where it lay.
    Its thorns, still in their infancy,
    were pliant to my touch
    but took strong hold of me.

    Over the years, with love and care,
    that rose has been well nourished;
    pressed between my heart and soul
    its beauty’s always flourished.


    Posted By Terence | Jun 4, 2007
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    Sally Roberts Forestdawn

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    Terence, Terence, Terence

    WOW!!! Let me be the first to say . This poem was BEAUTIFUL!!!!! I absolutely loved every word you wrote. The rhyming flowed as smooth as silk. Your talent is superb!

    Awesome in every sence of the word. Great work here!!!!!! I LOVED IT!!

    Thank You
    Blessings

    bloodletting_of_the_sky New Member

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    a mighty metaphorical peice of art you have displayed here...
    one that has matched passion with love. the dripping word play,
    like water so refreshing, running downward on the screen and into your heart with the last line.... very inpressive and personal....
    thank you for your talent friend

    light and peace to you
    phil

    Terence Member

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    Thanks so much, Sally, for the glowing response. If you know of the Scottish poet Burns you'll know where I got my inspiration for this.

    Terence


    Posted By Terence | Jun 5, 2007
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    Terence Member

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    I appreciate your response, Phil, and am pleased you liked it. The feelings in this come from many years of marriage.

    Terence


    Posted By Terence | Jun 5, 2007
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    bloodletting_of_the_sky New Member

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    ah.... well that tid bit shed new light on the overall meaning of this peice of art.....
    your very welcome my friend...

    oh... what other poertry sites are you involved in?
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    PaintedDiary JPiC Mentor

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    Dear Terence,

    This was such a treat to read. Beautifully crafted and executed. One of the most beautiful poems I have ever read. Intimate, like an intricate poetic fillagree. The images and fluidity were amazing! Reads like it should be on a Hallmark Card. Breath-taking to say the least. Loved it! Excellent rating. Thank you so much for sharing this with us.

    Kim :)

    Jer4clarity Lover of Meanings

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    Totally Awesome DUDE!

    Terence,

    This is so well written and flows with such grace. I can't give you my fav unless I put the whole thing in Quotes!


    Jerry:dance2:

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    Thank you so much for those compliments, Kim, :blush: they are very encouraging to this budding writer.



    I appreciate your comments too, Jerry, they are good to hear considering who they're from.

    Terence


    Posted By Terence | Jun 10, 2007
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