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    Whistle Wind
    Sing me a song
    Quiet as a hummingbird,
    Yet strong as love

    Play your rhythm
    Etch it in my mind
    Add in thunderous percussions
    And a cosmic light show

    Briefly deafen my ears
    And blind my eyes
    So that I may truly feel your song

    Every touch of your breath
    A beautiful note
    Every whistle
    A masterpiece

    Pellets of wetness
    Make their début
    My body is now a canvas.

    Paint me with your brilliance oh wind.
    So I will always respect your power.
    Caress me with your presence oh rain
    So I’ll never forget your gentleness

    Whistle oh wind,
    Whistle me a song.

    LW 3/8/06


    Posted By shawnie | Jun 28, 2006
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    FaShaBaby Rhapsodist Pinay

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    This was nice, shawnie. I give you props for coming up with this. It was very serene.

    "Pellets of wetness
    Make their début
    My body is now a canvas."

    That stanza was excellent. You go gurl.


    Posted By FaShaBaby | Jun 29, 2006
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    GetShorty New Member

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    This makes me want to go sit out in a thunderstorm. That would be silly, of course, but it just shows how attractive you made nature out to be. I also liked how you described the power of it all... "Deafen me", "blind me"... Wow. :)

    I think this was very well written. :)


    Posted By GetShorty | Jul 9, 2006
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    FaShababy and getshorty are right. You really brought out the beauty of nature in this piece.


    Posted By thoma | Jul 11, 2006
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    Hey Shawnie,
    I just wanted to comment twice. This piece is simply exquisite, and a masterpiece. I read this a few times, because it is so tranquil and serene. I feel like I am walking slowly in the Garden of Eden, taking time to talk to nature. Shawnie, this is one of the most beautiful poems, I have ever read. We are blessed that you are here.:girltender:

    Much Luv'...~*Painted Diary*~

    shawnie New Member

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    Thanks fellas and fellettes. I appreciate all the kind words and comments. I'm trying to slow down and smell the roses, the rain, all that. There is so much we take for granted. I just wanted to bring something different to you guys.

    Thanks again.


    Posted By shawnie | Jul 12, 2006
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Hey SHAWNIE - I think I've seen this piece before ;) But that doesn't really stop me from commenting on the beauty of this piece - You've described a serenity that many want to know; few have sought it!

    Really beautiful write SHAWNIE - you continue to surprise with your poetic flow! Thanx for sharing!

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Jul 12, 2006
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    There aren't enough nature poems out there.


    Posted By TrueBlue | Jul 17, 2006
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    LW Barker New Member

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    Very nice Shawnie, but the LW 03/08/06 makes me curious....


    Posted By LW Barker | Jul 17, 2006
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