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    Sally Roberts Forestdawn

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    "Night Visitor"

    As the tell tale heart was beating,
    I had caught myself repeating,
    At the rhythms that were fleeting,
    When I walked across the floor.

    It was then I heard the tapping,
    And the constant rap, rap, rapping,
    Like dry naked bones were clapping,
    When I opened up the door.

    A ghost was there just staring,
    With its eyes so big and glaring,
    There was no way of preparing,
    What stood there before my sight.

    Was it here to take me souling,
    In the wind so cold and blowing,
    'Neath the moon so full and glowing,
    On this crisp October night?

    In the moments that were slipping,
    I had felt my heart skip-skipping,
    Through the knob that I was gripping,
    I was frightened to the core.

    Then there came the errie laughter,
    And I knew what it was after,
    When its shouts had shook the rafter,
    TRICK or TREAT and nothing more.

    lanaia74 New Member

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    AWESOME! AWESOME! AWESOME! The tale tell heart, brilliant!


    Posted By lanaia74 | Oct 22, 2006
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    Sally Roberts Forestdawn

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    Greetings!
    Since I won't be online on Halloween day,
    I just thought I'd bring this poem back to the front so everyone could read "Night Visitor" again

    H A P P Y H A L L O W E E N!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    Don't eat too much candy! Like me LOL

    JolieH JPiC Contributor

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    Sally,
    I just loved your trick or treat poem,

    Happy Halloween to you.


    Posted By JolieH | Nov 1, 2007
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    Aumakua Misunderstood

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    I loved this one too!!! But i liked the first one i read even more :p What type of poem is this? I don't really know the different types of poems >.< But i see that it rhymes for the first 3 lines of the stanzas =o That must've been hard to write o_O Awesome! :D


    Posted By Aumakua | Nov 3, 2007
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    Jer4clarity Lover of Meanings

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    Sally,

    You know the "tell tale heart" story don't you.. this is an excellent poetic, and I might add Halloween fancied addition of this great haunting piece!

    I loved it!

    ~(;) Jer4Clarity
    Creator of the Clarity Pyramid


    Posted By Jer4clarity | Nov 3, 2007
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    butchiesmom JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Wow!

    Meter was strong and even throughout the entire poem! It was a pleasure to read! I would check, though, I think tell tale should be telltale. I think it's one word, not two.

    The story, in the poem, was consistent throughout. It was easy and pleasurable (the meter was simply delicious) to read. Though it was a Halloween poem, it wasn't a corny, I'm going to scare you kind of poem, it was a fun poem.

    Fun, enjoyable, and great even for a child to read.

    Great job, Sally!
    Gail


    Posted By butchiesmom | Nov 5, 2007
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    feralpen New Member

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    It's an absolute must to read the poem a second time. One CANNOT fully appreciate the wit and clever wording until they have read the 'punch line'. This is smooth and showcases the talents of an accomplished writer. I love humorous writes ... so thanks for a special "TREAT".

    fp


    Posted By feralpen | Nov 5, 2007
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    PaintedDiary JPiC Mentor

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    Dear Sally,

    I agree! The clever wording and beautifully executed meter and rhyme are just masterful...a joyous Hallows' Eve Tale that the family can read. Superb dahling! lol

    Kim ;)

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    a delightful little halloween poem - I enjoyed it


    Posted By BekiLynn | Nov 17, 2007
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    Bear JPiC Contributor

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    great penning for halloween Sally Iloved it
    hugs kisses
    Bear


    Posted By Bear | Nov 30, 2007
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