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    deep_poet86 Endless Rewind

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    In another time we held each other
    like there was no end
    Just me and you together in
    a place that doesn't exist
    to their peeping eyes

    We are closed in around
    a field of love
    and it continues growing
    even after we are gone from
    its surrounding

    I remember our last day together
    It was the first time we kissed
    and felt so free
    All I wanted was to hold your
    hand and feel the joy of love

    But then she seen us and grabbed you
    from me
    That was the last day I seen you
    I laid there for hours hugging myself
    wishing you were here

    You kept whispering that someday we
    would be able to walk around the world
    Love each other without jealousy and all the
    bad things that come with love and regret

    Even though I can't see you now
    I know we will always have feelings
    strong forever
    And when we finally see each other again
    I know our love will grow
    again and again

    By: Lee-Ann Wolsey
    11/24/2007
    8:28pm

    Dedicated To: Patrick

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    This reminded me of a friend who I loved, and the last time we saw each other.. we had a kiss.
    He wasn't snatched away but left willingly to another place in hopes of bettering himself.

    I hope you find the remedy to the ache of love...
    Many have tried.
    Most have failed.


    Posted By Smiley24_7 | Dec 4, 2007
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    although somber by the mood this cast, i did sense a bit of optimism by the conclusion this canvas artist. i know many can relate to heartbreak & this wasn't portrayed as if a Hallmark cliche`. some passage (stanzas) i enjoyed.

    "I remember our last day together
    It was the first time we kissed
    and felt so free
    All I wanted was to hold your
    hand and feel the joy of love...

    keep the ink spilling by the puddles atist. one-

    deep_poet86 Endless Rewind

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    Thank you both, I am glad you enjoyed it :)

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