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    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    ~OCEAN OF TEARS~

    Come and sail my ocean of bitter tears.
    Deep inside each drop there's a fish of fears.
    If you look close enough you'll see Pisces in the swim
    with a gash in a gill and a broken fin.

    There's a whale of worries in a weeping wave
    in the cry of claws of a crab of crave
    and that crab is me in a mist of 'morrow
    being chased by the shark of sorrow.

    In my heart there's a piranha of pain
    and barracuda's eating what's left of my brain.
    I'm drowning as my tears overflow as the moon wanes,
    drowning in the making of my own rain.

    Come brave the waters of my raging tears.
    Be the bait and hook my fish of fears.
    Come with your dolphins of deepest love
    and soar with me on seagulls of sympathy above.

    © Karen Davies


    Posted By Moonchild | Mar 6, 2008
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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    :wow: Karen, once again you have surpassed my expectations in poetic form...both the graphics and the poem itself are fantastic!! Thank you so much for sharing this with us! I love it...and I'm sure that quite a few of us can relate to the words you so masterfully crafted.

    and that crab is me in a mist of 'morrow
    being chased by the shark of sorrow.

    In my heart there's a piranha of pain
    and barracuda's eating what's left of my brain.
    I'm drowning as my tears overflow as the moon wanes,
    drowning in the making of my own rain.


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    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    Thank you Nomad.
    That's the part I figured people would
    relate to. I'm glad you liked it :)


    Posted By Moonchild | Mar 7, 2008
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    Dear Karen,

    What can I say. I am a HUGE fan of your poetry. That graphic...oh my goshness is stunning and so elegantly placed as a prerequisite of what is to come. You make poetry seem effortless, timeless, and beautiful. One cannot read just once. Like after a long aromatic bath then slipping into scented satin sheets. Simply beautiful in content, presentation, and execution...as always. LOVED IT and going in my favorites! Excellent rating as well.

    Kimberly :)

    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    Thank you so much Kimberly
    for your kind words.
    I truely appreciate them all(hugs)


    Posted By Moonchild | Mar 8, 2008
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    crazymamma5 angelic mamma

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    I loved the graphic that was so cool! The poem really touched my heart and expressed how I am feeling, but don't know how to put it into my own words. Loved it!

    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    That's okay crazymamma.
    Sometime's I am lost for words over people's
    poetry too, I understand*hug*
    Thanks for reading and replying:girltender:


    Posted By Moonchild | Mar 13, 2008
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    Magnificent penning Moonchild such beauty in the images and sound of your teary ocean
    I am a big fan of your poems and writings you have a wonderful talent and gift and an excellent way with wording
    hugs kisses
    bear


    Posted By Bear | Mar 25, 2008
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    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    You are so sweet bear and I want to say thank you
    and that I appreciate every word*hugs and kisses*
    Off to read yours :girltender:


    Posted By Moonchild | Mar 26, 2008
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    bitter tears, weeping wave, beautiful, vibrant words, love it


    Posted By Eric | Apr 11, 2008
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    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    Thank you so much Eric...glad you loved it!


    Posted By Moonchild | Apr 12, 2008
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    Id just like to say you are a beautiful writer, and i love the alliteration. Never stop writing, because this is truely an amazing original.

    - My mom goes by the anem moonchild, or moonwillow all the time. Lol, thought that was kinda coincidental.

    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    Thank you so much ShayShay...you sound very sweet*hugs*
    I was born in July so that makes me a Moonchild therefore my screen name.
    Glad you like my writing, thank you :)


    Posted By Moonchild | Apr 24, 2008
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