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    Of Love Untold

    Your love to me
    Untold, yet pure
    And as innocent as the nightengale in song
    Ends now, without regret:

    - I love you -

    A spoken word
    A silent dream
    And the world was new again
    There is nothing of such wonder, I feel
    "You my love
    are my love"

    And As the days pass slowly
    With silent, growing unrest
    Quickly, now, do I tell you
    The truth in its distress:

    'I love you more. - I need you less.'


    -

    And Through it all, you remained
    A sullen, silent, tranquil dream
    Still perfect to me, in every way
    Yet, somehow it did change.

    Your long, soft, flowing hair
    Your lovely, lucid shape
    Your body, perfect as it is
    Our simple nakedness

    To change in a soul's weak wandering
    As in time all things must
    To make of my love a butterfly
    Betraying to you a lust

    And such is the tale of love
    That in its confusion, has gone awry
    Of the emptiness of the male and female form
    That, in love's absense, lies


    Posted By TrueBlue | Jul 16, 2006
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    J. Marie New Member

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    Paul, I loved this piece....it tore at my heart strings..beautiful, emotional write...
    J. Marie


    Posted By J. Marie | Aug 8, 2006
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Hi PAUL - I must agree with J. Marie - this is just simply beautiful piece of poetry. Laden with a thick emotion - their seems to be a sadness of sorts in this piece though... Perhaps an awakening of truth... The knowledge of loving more and needing less - that line insinuates a strength of character that only true soulmates know. But what your poem hints at is that in the loving is a need that can never be satiated:

    Simply beautiful writing PAUL - Thanx for sharing it with us!

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Oct 13, 2006
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    Very Beautiful read Paul

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