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Discussion in 'Emotional Romantic' started by Sartor, Dec 12, 2006.



    Sartor JPiC Contributor

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    OLD LOVE
    .
    I walk alone the path of life,
    my destiny to fill.
    I march but to my drum, my fife
    and lonely bagpipe trill.
    .
    If to your heart I have caused pain,
    I did not mean it so.
    My love is soft as Summer’s rain
    and pure as Winter’s snow.
    .
    Should we but chance to meet again,
    within a span of years.
    How should I then address your pain,
    with silence or with tears?
    .
    And should you rush with open arms
    and smiling eyes to me,
    to show again those lovely charms,
    that once had captured me.
    .
    I would be forced to turn away,
    lest you should chance to hear,
    the breaking of this heart of clay,
    or see the running tear.
    .
    Sartor


    Posted By Sartor | Dec 12, 2006
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    Benny New Member

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    Love this work, Sartor...very much. Well written.


    Posted By Benny | Dec 12, 2006
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    Sartor JPiC Contributor

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    Thanks Benny.........Happy Holidays to you and yours


    Posted By Sartor | Dec 14, 2006
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    Sartor,
    This is a touching piece of work! Thank you for sharing it and keep up the good work! :welldone:

    Have a great day!

    ~Cali~


    Posted By CaliBreeze | Dec 14, 2006
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    Sartor,
    Very well written, sad, pulled me in. good writing.
    Ron


    Posted By ronbliss | Dec 14, 2006
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    Dear Sartor,

    Lovely piece. Captivating and well written. The message was clear. Made me go back down my own "Memory Lane". Thank you for sharing this, I loved it!!

    ~*Painted*~ :artist:

    Sartor JPiC Contributor

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    Cali........thank you for the compliment...I wish you well.

    Ron.......Thanks for your words..glad you liked the poem.

    Painted.......Old loves haunt every heart from time to time.....or so it is said. Thanks for the comments.


    Posted By Sartor | Dec 15, 2006
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    i can see a lot of work went into this poem, well worth it aswell, its very good :)

    athlone www.poetrypages4u.com

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    Sartor - I was riveted by your penmanship.
    The pathos, atmosphere, so well blended with the meter and metaphore.
    There can be no greater comment than that the very core of my being was moved.
    Beautiful work.

    Zvi
    :welldone:
    poetrypages4u


    Posted By athlone | Dec 18, 2006
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    Sartor JPiC Contributor

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    violetpearl..........Thank you for your comments...I appreciate it.

    athlone.........To hear such praise of ones work is like an aphrodisiac. Thank you for the kind words.


    Posted By Sartor | Dec 18, 2006
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    Beautiful read...A masterpiece that touches the heart...Hugs, Twinks

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