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    santre_63 New Member

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    One afternoon Sunshine was in a reflective mood
    She emailed: “My life has been about the promises
    I have made and a desire to keep them.
    I wish I was different though....women, who don't,
    Seem to have a better time!
    And men find them so desirable”
    I prodded her on and she emailed back:
    “Maybe I am blabbering...but I see women who don’t
    Make any promises or constantly break them
    Are happy, and men find them alluring”
    This was the second time
    She had alluded to men who’ll always be boys
    Finding certain kinds of women attractive
    I didn’t want to read in between the lines
    (Could have been presumptuous)
    But felt like empathising with her
    I said those who appear to be footloose
    And fancy-free deep inside are weighed down
    By a debilitating emptiness
    Kundera called this "the unbearable lightness of being"
    Sunshine, sort of, cheered up
    And wrote: “Nothing changes
    I have things to do, places to go
    And many promises to keep”

    And so ended our chit-chat
    On a balmy October afternoon
    But before that I asked her
    To email a smile
    Which I received
    By the return mail…:)


    Posted By santre_63 | Oct 15, 2006
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    Abae New Member

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    This feels sa...................d, she shut down when confronted. It sounds as if she was only trying to appear to be happy, until you:

    interesting dont you think?


    Posted By Abae | Oct 15, 2006
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    I don't know ABAE - what's sad about getting an email smile... I wonder if Sunshine really "meant" her email smile???

    Hi SANTRE - pleasure reading you! I liked this poem - the language is sophisticated and the meaning seems to inspire hope. I know the feeling of being weighted down - Love how you say "the unbearable lightness of being"

    Your poem is filled with original idea:

    Seems like you didn't demand the last line - but instead placed the ball in someone elses court -----> I tend to wonder if the smile returned was as original as this writing?

    Anyrate - thanx for sharing and WELCOME again to the JPiC Community :)

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Oct 15, 2006
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