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Discussion in 'Emotional Romantic' started by Moonchild, Aug 26, 2007.



    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    ~OUR SONG~

    I wrote a song
    of love for you
    and started with a rhyme
    but by the time I finished it
    the rhyme beat free verse time.

    Much like the story
    of our love, at first
    it was divine but as the
    pages turned with time
    a heartache did unwind.

    In the beginning the
    air was fresh like
    Springtime in a breeze but
    as warm days turned into years
    our hearts suffered winter freeze.

    But it's my song
    and I get to end it
    and end it I will do.
    I'll be the words of sweetest love
    and I'll find the rhyme in you.

    © July 15, 2005 Karen Davies


    Posted By Moonchild | Aug 26, 2007
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    PoetryInMotion PoetryInMotion

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    Nice Poem

    I liked this part best

    In the beginning the
    air was fresh like
    Springtime in a breeze but
    as warm days turned into years
    our hearts suffered winter freeze

    I'm always wanting to tag with words of a poem or words that inspire me
    But they tell me it clogs the system, so I will have to keep this short to some extent.

    Anyway, Great poem Moonchild

    Art

    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    :thankyou: so much Art.
    I appreciate it ;)


    Posted By Moonchild | Aug 27, 2007
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    Mysty JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Hey Moonchild.... I loved the beat of this ...... the almost rhyme..... It seems like you have been singing my song. Great write :)

    Mysty


    Posted By Mysty | Aug 27, 2007
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    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    Thank you Misty, I do appreciate that
    and I'm glad you liked it :wub:


    Posted By Moonchild | Aug 27, 2007
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