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    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    this is written about shadow poetry not accepting any of my poems for publication I don't like them.

    You helped me shape this bitter face,
    now you tell me to it you can't relate,

    I was trapped in shadows and cast away,
    I want to damn you for how you treated me,
    but damned I may already be,

    With vigilence, your vulture preyed everytime myself I couldn't save,

    You still have never gave me the love I needed,
    you poured ice-water down my veins,

    In this time your shadow now has no effect on me,
    I have learned beyond it and realize,
    we sickened the message,
    poisons pleasure, your cure,
    a knife with diamond-edges,

    how many have risen out of shadows,
    to take revenge of sight?,
    back to reveal at last,
    and do what I must to reveal God's light.

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    I hear your anger with publishers and such...but, we gotta have them! Fickle sometimes, but always looking...hope they'll find someone in here! Wonderful write about the feelings of a writer shunned...I understand it. Good stuff, Erik.


    Posted By Benny | Dec 12, 2006
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    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    thanks Benny yeah publishers are important they know it too,
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    Hiya Erik,

    Good that you were able to write out those feelings of being shunned. Shadow Poetry is but a stone in a beach of many pebbles.
    If Shadow Poetry won't then try another. This was a good read. Thanks for sharing.

    ~Mysty~

    Ps.. in line 12.. Poisons


    Posted By Mysty | Dec 13, 2006
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    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    of course I just need Bennys contacts now truthfully it hurt I'd been with them a year, but I found out this morning it was my fault I thought I submited many poems but only submitted one, yeah i'm not gonna stop writing and i'll try hitting the big publishers when I can take it,
    thanks for the review

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