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    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    In the air there's the sweet lilac redemption,
    all our troubles never mentioned,

    Your wills been taken and now you sit never moving,
    out of touch with choosing your fate,

    In your mind there is a terror,
    in your fact you aren't aware,

    brightening up your life,
    can't happen over-night,
    You choose your life,
    You choose everything so set in motion,

    If your tears make you feel shame,
    let it be a cleansing rain,
    If you miss where you came,
    feel the way you can maintain,

    the sorrow that surrounds you,
    a mind full of terror,
    isn't what your bound for,
    overcome your despair,

    Pain in life is air,
    so show someone that you were made well.

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    Quite the message Erik:

    I liked the lines: "Brightened up you life, can't happen overnight"

    Very true and right to the point. I enjoyed reading this one. Thanks for sharing

    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    thanks Sally it was an inspiration,
    sometimes I think I must be speaking to myself as well lol,

    glad you liked it and that any part stuck with you
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    Dear Erik,

    First, I like the title--->Overcoming Despair. Despair is a very poignant word and you coupled it with the word "Overcoming", and I liked that allot. So already, although, I know the write may be sad, I will read of some hope along the way. The poem suggests despair of a major issue; life. So, major healing is in order, so the stanza that I highlighted in Purple is spot on, and message clear. I also love the line-->

    Pain in life is air

    That is so true, it is everywhere, and when the waters gain a sense of tranquility, here comes a riptide. However, for some pain, if we did not experience, we would not learn from it, and know what we "Don't Want" as a prerequisite. Very real emotion here, as I felt you dug deep, and almost seems testimonial if you will. I loved it! Thank you for sharing this Erik.

    Kim :) :wubclub:

    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Kim I always miss your reviews i fthey don't come,
    since you have always an experts understanding and a
    very nice talent for flattery as well,
    you can't help but make someone feel good,
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    No flattery here Erik, all is real. I hate fake people, with fake agendas, and is one of my pet peeves. I love you and love your work period.

    Kimberly
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    JONATHAN living not existing.

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    Eric this piece is inspiration in totality , all of us hav something to giv to the peeps around us so its a constant giv n take we hav goin on ... i think this is not only a poem ..its a poem that has a message for those who dont even giv a damn bout poetry ,, its pro life ..im not gonna favour a single line coz everyline here just rings out with truth and faith ..uve done well bro ..JONATHAN


    Posted By JONATHAN | Jun 2, 2007
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    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    I know Kim I couldn't find another word but flattery maybe you ould help me find the defenation for feeling joyful by praise

    thanks Jonathan,
    see what the dark times can do for you Jonathan,
    this poem was written in them

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