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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Painful. Heartbreak. Tickling Me.

    It hurts so sweetly, so gently, so
    tenderly. If I did not know it
    as my heart being broken, I'd have
    thought it tickling me everso
    sweetly, gently, tenderly. I die.


    Copyright © 2011 Jacquii Cooke





    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Jun 8, 2011
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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Wow! Sweet death indeed, Ms. J… melodiously moving in its simplicity and sincerity... and yes, I've had that feeling quite a few times, myself.

    I really love the smooth chocolatey slipping off into oblivion, not bothering oneself enough to pay attention and focus on the "breaking heart"... it's almost an afterthought...

    Nomad :beach:
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    an afterthought indeed Nomad! I actually felt like crying ((it's a loooong boring story..)) but instead - decided to try putting my feelings into a poem. Though I like a good cry every now-and-then, poetry is much more therapeudic I think LOL - This was a bit of an impromptu write, but I actually find these 5 lines to be quite provocative in a sense.

    Thanks for the poetic love :wub:

    Jacquii.


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    Hi Jacquii,
    Unique descriptions... effective and impressive in just five lines. Though it's been a really long time, I think I remember having a similar experience. Like how a really cold freeze can crack cement... a breaking heart can start with a slight crack, a tickle, but in the end, that "freeze" sneaks in and causes irrepairable damage.


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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Wow- I couldn't have phrased that any better! And yes - I believe the analogy of cold freeze cracking cement is a perfect one actually. Or perhaps a cold breeze cracking the cement is similar to the "tickling" I speak of. Feels like merely a light, cold wind, but is so much more if you have the capacity for recognizing it.

    Anyway - Thanks so much for taking the time to comment this short piece. I appreciate it! ;)


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Jun 10, 2011
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