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    Poetry Garden New Member

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    You filled my heart with red
    My sky you painted blue
    The flowers on the ground
    you left a purple hue


    I can’t help but wonder
    What it would be like
    To paint my life by numbers
    With the help of you

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    Very interesting poem here. I liked it actually. I would've loved it to continue a bit longer because even though it was short the colors and the way you incorporated them into the poem was very nice and it immediately catches your attention and holds it as the poem develops. It just leaves you wanting more of the poem at the end. I actually found myself reading it over and over and then making up more to the poem in my head lol. This was truely something sweet and lovely...thanks for the read;


    Posted By KingAce | Sep 16, 2007
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    Thank you so much for your comment KingAce, you are right, there could be more but then you wouldn't be reading it over and over LOL...seriously though, I hear this every once in awhile...wanting more. I believe less is more BUT I also believe we can always change what we have written. I have gone back and changed poems from a year ago...it has to hit me just right when this happens...does that make sense?
    Thanks again I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment!

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