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Discussion in 'Emotional Romantic' started by Bear, Feb 16, 2008.



    Bear JPiC Contributor

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    Paradise
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    Alabaster clouds caress the black velvet sky
    And the ocean sings an ancient song.
    As the smooth silk sands whispers her name
    On a tranquil breeze
    ~
    Reaching into turquoise waves
    Frothy emerald bubbles eases through my fingers
    Tiny pebbles jingle like flowing wind chimes
    The warm jasmine breeze gently rustles the palm leaves
    Glittering stars swirling in distant galaxies
    ~
    I see her smiling at my amazement.
    I ask if this is Paradise
    She reaches up, extracting a star from the Heavens
    Gently placing it over my eye
    ~
    Astonishingly, I visualize the fragrance of the breeze
    I listen to the colors of her whispering voice.
    As I realize I am in Paradise






    Posted By Bear | Feb 16, 2008
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    Sally Roberts Forestdawn

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    Honey Bear:

    I too am in paradise. This poem really places the imagery in the forefront.
    Romantic and sensual. You always bring within your words of love heartwarming hugs and comfort.
    I always look forward in reading your beautiful poems.

    Blessings
    Sally

    Bear JPiC Contributor

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    Thank you so much my sweet Sally so happy you enjoy reading my poems and I truly appreciate the time you take to read them
    hugs kisses
    bear


    Posted By Bear | Feb 17, 2008
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    Mysty JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Bear .... honestly hon.... this is exquisite... truly magnificent use of imagery ..... I long to be in your paradise Bear...


    Mysty


    Posted By Mysty | Feb 17, 2008
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    PaintedDiary JPiC Mentor

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    Dear Bear,

    I am speechless....stunning...simply exquisite. To think if we could reach up and grab a star..and the last stanza is simply extra heavenly. I love love love your work Bear. You are JPiC's Romance Czar / Connoisseur...keep'm coming Bear! Woohooooo!!!!! Loved it! Excellent rating and going in my favs!

    {{{{~~~***Painted***~~~}}}}:grouphug:

    Kimberly

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    I love this Bear,
    It paints a surreal image, couds at night, a singing sea, whispering sands, jingling pebbles, must be all those meds in the hospital... Lol just kidding, It's fun, very imaginative.
    Another beautiful poem, truely in your own creative style.

    Hugs...


    Posted By JolieH | Feb 17, 2008
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    BekiLynn New Member

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    it is lovely, Bear....


    Posted By BekiLynn | Feb 23, 2008
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    Bear JPiC Contributor

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    Mystym Painted, jolie, and bekilynn sweet wonderful ladies thank you so much for the magnificent and beautiful comments I truly appreciate them and you.
    hugs kisses
    bear


    Posted By Bear | Feb 23, 2008
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