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    WilkoUK New Member

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    Here's another one written a long time ago. See what you think.


    Again life shows it's feelings
    Walking slowly and languidly into my mind,
    She utters her meaningless throw-away words,
    That mean far too much to me.
    Paranoia, insecurity hold me
    But they shouldn't.
    Waking and suffering in hope
    That maybe this time...?
    Hope, another weakness
    Gullibility, another flaw.
    A tragic combination.
    My emotions lie in the hands of another
    Who juggles unaware of the cost.

    I am dismissed, forgotten,
    An eternal torture awaits this victim.
    Stuck in a game of chance
    Communication is minimal,
    Which hinders choice
    But is there a choice?
    Neither of us are strong enough
    To say what we mean
    Or mean what we say,
    I wish I was,
    But she holds all the feelings.

    Whats more she can't juggle.


    Posted By WilkoUK | Oct 18, 2006
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    OH NO! LOL - I like this write WILKO - It's kinda like "damned if I do, damned if I don't" That's the vybe I get from this poem... One passage in particular has me wondering though:

    I wonder if those are actually questions. I think it would be good if those were questions LOL - It seems at the end though - You have kept one of the most fabulous character traits imaginable on this earth: your sense of humor!

    Nice write - Enjoyed this one thoroughly.
    Thanx for sharing it!

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Oct 31, 2006
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    I liked this one...very much! I feel as if I have been there...


    Posted By Benny | Nov 1, 2006
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    WilkoUK New Member

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    Thanks for the comments guys!!

    I was never sure I was going to keep that last line but I liked the image of emotions and feelings being juggled and then dropped on to the floor. Also I liked that the person juggling is probably getting frustrated that they can't juggle and therefore my silly feelings are really pissing them off!


    Posted By WilkoUK | Nov 4, 2006
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