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    Tha-Emissary Black Knight!

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    Baby he didn’t know how to harvest you
    How to grab you gently off of Venus’ Tree
    Naw, he was hungry
    Feening for sugar
    Desiring the aroma of peach cobbler in his mouth
    So he cut it with his little bitty knife
    Sucked all night, pillaging all your sweet juices
    With one vampirish bite
    Into your pearl which sensually rocked his world
    Though he wasn’t really a man
    Because he couldn’t handle that sweetness
    Thoughts of how your sugar could make cavities in his heart
    So he ran away, Drew apart like cowardly sun that only leaves the dark
    Walked quickly away down the isle like a dissatisfied consumer
    Trying to believe in his own lie that he didn’t like your premium produce
    Saying you were nothing more than 100% juice
    But so suddenly like the wind that blows unconsciously
    Breezing into the storm of an enemy
    He tried to spit out the hard heart
    Spit out your heartbeats out in the dirt
    Like the hard seed left behind an eaten peach
    Nobody ever wants.
    But today I find my self walking, looking, and searching
    For the right spring peach and there you are
    In front of me
    Your body hurt, flesh bitten, and juices crying out
    Afraid to say you’re are a beautiful seed
    Alone and angry
    I wonder should I pick you off the ground
    I wonder do I want seconds
    Even though my mind tells me no
    But my heart
    My own seed
    Says yes!
    Plant your seed in with mine
    Therefore, I grab you by the waist
    Allow you to listen to my seed,
    Softened from seeing you cry
    I grab further smothering you with my dirty skin
    Then bury you in my heart
    Feeding you all of my fertile heart beats
    In all hopes that you again find your roots
    That will grow fresh roots with me, spread love with me
    So fall into my arms baby as I am your vines
    Wrapped around you like little green serpents
    Not biting
    Only stroking you up and down lovingly
    That you may lift up your hands like leaves and scream
    I am a beautiful
    I am fruitful
    I have bared new fruit
    Bared new love
    All I ask in return is that you caress
    My neck with your gentle new leaves
    Reach up for me like the sun
    And smile just because
    You like the sunlight in
    My eyes.

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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    :wow: FIERCE! This piece is spokenword fierce, delicious and stubborn like the clingstone if you will...

    Hey EMISSARY and again I say welcome to the Community. I like this poem very much and they way you analogize the peach to sensuous love and the seed to a sensuous love in need of the man with the green-thumb. This poem is sweet - I knew right from the passionate beginning lines that I'd like this one - I'd like to recite this one... The pace is almost furious. The rhythmic timing could be a spoken word STUNNING! With brief pauses for the audience to show love:

    This is SWEET! Wonderful write - A very nice 1st share!
    Thanx for sharing it with us ;)

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Apr 30, 2008
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Apr 30, 2008
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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Definitely a "hot" piece of poetry...I love the many flavored visualizations portrayed here...so sexy and delicious but with an underlying sense of rejection, defiance and finally, forgiveness.

    Nomad

    Tha-Emissary Black Knight!

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    Yeah I was lost like sausages in a gumbo but I'll get on that Avatar. I can't be having no bo bo profile Ms. JacquiiC. Thanks you and nomad for the warm welcome and I'll be looking out for some of your enlightening poetic verbs as well. Have a Ghetto Fabulous Day!

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    this rocks. i normally don't like longer poems, but this one kept my attention. flawlessly done.

    zaac


    Posted By zaac | May 1, 2008
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    LOL - Kewl avatar choice for Black Knight :D
    Also visited your Author's Den page - Saw this quote: I was evicted out of my mother’s womb after a nine month lease was broken. Almost busted a gut laughin MAO tehehehe

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | May 2, 2008
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    Tha-Emissary Black Knight!

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    Thanks Zaac, I try not to write really long poems but I couldn't compact the feeling. You know how it is when you go to buffet and you trying to put all that good stuff on one plate. Well I just get two plates to do myself some justice. I'll be looking out for some of your writes. Take care and be easy! As for you Ms J. I glad you checked my site out. I'll be checking you out too! In the meantime if you wanted to recite that poem Picking Peaches I'd be honored. Hope you have a crunk weekend!
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    butchiesmom JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    I can see why everyone is so excited about your work. You write well. Using a peach analogy works so well!

    I'm looking forward to reading more of your work.

    Gail


    Posted By butchiesmom | May 2, 2008
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