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    In my dream I came to you,
    I saw you sleeping the dream that was only dreamed by a few,
    I had to dive in your soul,
    But your mind was like a glass bowl;
    I never got out.

    Running without the moving ability.

    I woke up screaming,
    I realized I was dreaming,
    Because I thought you were here with me,
    But only fantasies I had been keeping.

    Kissing without the intimacy.

    Days went by me,
    You walked me past everyday,
    But you never came to notice me,
    Like everyday there was a copy of you and your way,
    Of walking, speaking and talking.

    Piracy without the visibility.

    In my dream I copied you,
    I treasured every dream i hoped to come true,
    But instead of a friend, you became a foe,
    And now you left me feeling cold.

    Bleeding without blood from my anatomy.

    So now should sell them?
    The copies I made every night,
    Of you and your mind,
    But you were never kind,
    Maybe you could bring balance into peoples lives?

    Piracy without the visibility.


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    Your words flowed like music. VERY well done!:goofy: :violin: :smilie-fight: O_O


    Posted By lanaia74 | Feb 17, 2007
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    Thank you lanaia :D Im glad you like it ;)


    Posted By ¤Me¤ | Feb 18, 2007
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    mangodroplet Blue Mango Puppy :]

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    wow...you're amazing...and you've started poetry so early!!
    PROPS!

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    Thank you! Really relieved people comment :p Thank you again ;)


    Posted By ¤Me¤ | Feb 21, 2007
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    mangodroplet Blue Mango Puppy :]

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    Any time!

    :]

    haha...you have so much insight :]
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    Here is the HUGE :wow: factor again! This is so amazingly written and and work of art! Definitely a favorite of mine, ME!

    I had to dive in your soul,
    But your mind was like a glass bowl;
    I never got out.

    There were many favorite lines in this one...the three above really grabbed hold of me. This is a golden piece.

    Loved it, loved it!!

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    Aww, thank you nomad! And mango :D I don't know what to say, i didnt even think i was a good poet and was really scared of sharing it to anyone :p So yeah, i dont know :p


    Posted By ¤Me¤ | Feb 24, 2007
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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Well now you know! We're waiting for more! How is the weather in Finland, and what's the time difference?

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    The weather, huh? I am afraid i might shock you with this, but it is -40 degrees over here. And yes, it is freezing, although i am used to that. And the time difference.. umm, i guess its +3.00 h or something...im not sure.


    Posted By ¤Me¤ | Feb 24, 2007
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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Unbelieveable!!! I would literally DIE!! I figured it was cold...but yikes! This is an especially cold year, it seems though. Have you tried the chatbox?

    Nomad
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    Dear Me,

    :wow: This is a Masterpiece at 13!! I would have quoted the entire piece, if I were to quote!! This is an amazing work of art with feeling, captivity, great execution, layering, and etc. Please continue to spread your poetic wings. Loved it!!

    {{{~~**KIM**~~}}};)2

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    Thanks kim :D Im glad you like it.

    nomad, you wouldnt die, you would freeze :p Nah, its not that cold when you get used to it ;)


    Posted By ¤Me¤ | Feb 25, 2007
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    mangodroplet Blue Mango Puppy :]

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    haha but for us californians, yes we would die...
    we wear flip flops when it's snowing =_=

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    Here with flip flops you would flip over :p Might get a few scars up your head XD


    Posted By ¤Me¤ | Mar 2, 2007
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    mangodroplet Blue Mango Puppy :]

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    haha, if you don't die first of hypothermia :]

    or frostbite, then you wouldn't have feet to trip over..:p

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    :p


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    Isn't it amazing how one person in our lives can hold our head and heart hostage? I love your work, Mex...this speaks loudly to anyone who had ever loved and that love not been returned and our dreams not come to an actuality. Great work!


    Posted By Benny | Mar 4, 2007
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    Thank you. Love not being returned.. that is actually something i am experiencing at the moment :p


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