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    Kit Carson JPiC Contributor

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    Considering the price we have to pay
    Why a poet would do it, who can know?
    Struggles are many, but we win the day
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    Seeing as how there’s so damn much to say
    Guard your ideals against the wind that blows
    All I ever wanted…to show the way
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    In our daily strife, silence held at bay
    Many the storms that toss us to and fro
    Struggles are many, but we win the day
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    Observing life’s light until the last ray
    Seeing is believing, let your light show
    All I ever wanted…to show the way
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    At the end of the day, let your head lay
    By your sweet love’s side, shining from the glow
    Struggles are many, but we win the day
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    A journey well worth the taking, come what may
    Beauty is found in the rhythm and the flow
    Struggles are many, but we win the day
    All I ever wanted…to show the way
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    Mjcarson
    8-14-2007


    Posted By Kit Carson | Aug 14, 2007
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    PaintedDiary JPiC Mentor

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    Dear Kit,

    This was quite lovely and well written. The message and concept hits a home run...Elegant in wording and so so so true. Thank you for sharing.

    Kim :)

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    A well crafted Villanelle and the
    content is so very true.
    Well worded and beautifully said.
    This is really good and I always
    enjoy a good Villanelle, thanks!


    Posted By Moonchild | Aug 17, 2007
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    Kit Carson JPiC Contributor

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    Thank you Kim and Karen. I think I will continue with this form and the pantoum, I love them both. Both forms require well-crafted lines. I feel like a tight-rope performer with no net at times. But what a feeling when you get the sweet part of the bat on the ball solidly, you hear that familiar sound and you know it's outta here. lol Yes I played baseball and city league softball.


    Posted By Kit Carson | Aug 17, 2007
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