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    Jer4clarity Lover of Meanings

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    Puncture Wound

    Be careful of the wound
    That sinks beneath the breast
    And closes up too soon.

    So quickly leaves the strike
    That sought the very heart
    With edges of a spike.

    The perforation’s mark
    Is nowhere to be seen.
    And so the festering begins
    Dull, then sharp, the throb
    O’er and o’er again.

    Hinting of infection
    Spreading underneath
    Desiring some detection

    A puncture without stain
    Clutching its poison
    Dispensing its pain.

    It was not thrust steel
    Nor hand that jabbed
    To aim and pierce so deep
    But twisting razor-pointed words
    That never, never sleep.

    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    So true, words cut deep.
    You express that well.
    Nice style and good use of words. I like it :)


    Posted By Moonchild | Jul 24, 2007
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    So close to what i've felt....
    but perhaps the antithesis...
    Words unsaid also cause wounds unseen.

    But....your poem rings true as well.
    Thanks for it
    -Anna

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    so excellent Jerry on eof my favorite poems that speak with old english,
    it has style flare and an abstractness to it as well
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    Jerry,

    :wow::wow: Truly a masterpiece here. Well executed and the word selecion with the touch of Old English is phenomenal! One of my favorites! I would have quoted the entire poem to emphasize a favorite line or phrase. Boy does that knife of words cut deep and is sooooooo true. There is a powerful message in this that is LOUD and CLEAR and TRUE! I would like to print this out with your permission. Jerry you have outdone yourself with this one. Loved It and an Excellent Rating! :bravo: Thank you so much for posting this. I will read several times I am sure.

    {{{~~~***Kimberly***~~~}}}

    Jer4clarity Lover of Meanings

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    Moonchild, Anna, Erik and PD,

    Thank you all so much for your kudos! I wear them close to my heart!

    Kim, go ahead and print out if you wish! (add my name at the bottom for my ego, pls!)

    Jerry

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    It was not thrust steel
    Nor hand that jabbed
    To aim and pierce so deep
    But twisting razor-pointed words
    That never, never sleep.

    great stanza...outstanding work...very powerful


    Posted By Checkmate | Jul 25, 2007
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    PaintedDiary JPiC Mentor

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    I agree with Scott, 2000 %, VERY Powerful indeed! Yes Jerry I am going to place your name on it, and tell everyone I show it to how wonderful you are.

    Kim :)
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    Dear Jerry: OUTSTANDING MESSAGE IS CONVEYED BY YOUR TALENTED HEART, SWEETIE!! Your poem is the outcoming of a broken heart, I guess. My cup overflows by reading through the stanzas, which are so inspiring...My analysis, theoretically speaking:
    "Puncture Wound" (The title, I think, it´s pain coming from the heart...)
    Be careful of the wound, (It could be devastating...)
    That sinks beneath the breast, (In the deepest part of the heart...)
    And closes up too soon. (It does not leave visible marks or scars, but the marks are always inwardly...)
    ..........................
    To aim and pierce so deep,
    ...Twisting razor-pointed words,
    That never, never sleep.

    Those are my favourite lines. I can imagine the inside poignant pain that love causes in one person. As a matter of fact, I have felt it myself so many times, but no more...Thanks God!! Jerry, I love your pictures that you posted in the Face of the Artist. I also love the pic of your Bull Terrier, Abba, with you holding your pet. My picture is also posted into that thread, but in the beginning of the pages, I guess. Thank you for sharing your sweet talents as a Poet with us, Jerry!! It is my real pleasure to meet you!! Warm Regards, Starry.:serenade: :cheers2:


    Posted By stardust | Jul 26, 2007
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    Poetry Garden New Member

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    puncture wounds can often be the most dangerous, great writing!
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    Hello Author!!! Hello Jerry!! Can you reply to us, saying something about the commentaries we have made over your poem, dear?? With kind appreciation, Starry.


    Posted By stardust | Jul 29, 2007
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    Jer4clarity Lover of Meanings

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    Sorry all for not responding sooner. I've been up in Idyllwild, CA performing in South Pacific. Got back late last night.

    I really appreciate every comment and the time you have all spent reading my work.

    I wrote this piece when my wife and I went through two and half years of separation and divorce. We are back together now. anyway the words that were spoken when we broke up really did go deep into my person. So, this is what they call this "method" writing, as it really does come from a personal experience.

    Thanks again for all your kind commments.

    Jerry

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    excellent Jer words do cut like sharpened knives deep clean so that they heal fast but jester to infection if not taken care of magnificent penning
    handshakes
    bear


    Posted By Bear | Jul 30, 2007
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    Jer4clarity Lover of Meanings

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    Thanks Bear

    I always appreciate your comments!

    handshakes
    Jerry

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