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    She reaches out her cold lifeless hand
    Beyond the barriers of fear between life and death
    Reaching for peace from the love she knew
    Wanting to feel his hand as she once did before she engaged her deadly quest.

    She just can't conceive an existence without him
    She longs for things from long ago
    Knowing never again can she touch him
    Longing for the love and warmth that would make her glow.

    She wished she could breach the thick sludge of death
    To let him know her love shall always be
    To tell him the only memories left
    His touch, his kiss, all the things he used to say.

    Wailing and crying because she can feel the loneliness
    Hoping he will hear her cries
    If only she could swim through death's placid ness
    Because she thinks it is unfair she died.

    So until he day she can reach his soul
    She will reach out forever and a day
    For reaching him is now her only goal
    She will not rest until he submits to clay


    Posted By lanaia74 | Oct 20, 2006
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    Mindings New Member

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    Awesome, I loved the third person narrative.

    Philip


    Posted By Mindings | Oct 20, 2006
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    I found this poem strikingly captivating, very smooth flowing although not throughout, very great poem, great lines, and a catchy appeal to it

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