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    Sally Roberts Forestdawn

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    She stands before
    the looking glass
    Her own reflection there,
    Eyes so empty
    brown and dark
    Cornrows entwined her hair.

    Forgotten memories
    of her past,
    To think of thoughts escape her,
    Behind the face
    forever lost
    Reflections of a stranger.

    Closet_Writer Pro-Ninja

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    I really like reading your poems and never hesitate to click on them.

    The "Cornrows" line sounds a bit akward to me, but I might just be putting the beats wrong.

    Either way, great stuff!

    Sally Roberts Forestdawn

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    Thanks for the comment Closet_Writer
    I am glad that you like my poetry. Thank You.

    The word "cornrows" is a type of braided hair style that are usually worn by African/American peoples. They are very beautiful.

    Blessed be

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    I knew about the hair style, I meant the entire line sounded akward. I think its beautiful that you think a lot of things are beautiful. It makes me happy inside. ^.^
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    Dear Sally,

    I do not know how I missed this one!!!! I fell into this one, as my mind traveled a bit. Almost want to say, that you wrote about me. I loved this. Simply beautiful. I understand that line perfectly...cornrows entwined her hair......just beautiful. Thank you for sharing and many blessings to you.

    {{{{{~~~***KIM***~~~}}}}}:)

    Sally Roberts Forestdawn

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    Merry Meet: Closet _Writer : and Kim


    Thank you for your comments. I truely enjoy each and every one of them. I wish I could write as well as some of you. Everyone here is so talented. And coming from the best of the best is indeed an honor.

    Blessings

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    Such a reflective
    write.... of the self.


    Posted By Jeez | May 27, 2007
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Introspective to say the least SALLY - I like this poem though
    Can certainly relate to staring in the mirror and wond'ring
    "Who are you?" --- Love the "cornrows" line
    I think BRIANNA may be wanting an "in" ----> "Cornrows entwined IN her hair..."
    But I think such beautifully poetically written as is.

    Nice piece!
    Thanx for the sharing ;)

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Jun 11, 2007
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    Bear JPiC Contributor

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    wonderful penning Sally sometimes we just dont see who we are then looking at our reflections as things in life changes so do we beautiful poem
    hugs kisses
    tom


    Posted By Bear | Jun 17, 2007
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    Hello!

    I enjoyed reading this poem and coming across it. I do have to admit I kind of had a "bump" with reading the cornrows part but as I read it again I appreciate it more and more... I think it was maybe the switch of describing the eyes to the hair but I think that the brown eyes compliments the last line. I also liked the imagery that the last line in the first stanza provided and got a real great visual with imagining it.

    I really do like the last line... a very nice way to end it and I feel like it ended your poem very strongly too. This poem made me think with reading it and I love when peoms do that. So, I say to keep on writing and keep up the great work!


    Posted By SarahNSH | May 1, 2008
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    Tha-Emissary Black Knight!

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    I like the title and it fits the message like a perfect frame. I think the poem shows how we can become so busy that we can not know ourselves for just trying to make a living. I think it's good to stand in the mirror for a few seconds because it one of the few times that we can say Hi to ourselves. Vice Versa we sometimes need to stand away from the mirror because we can get caught up! Be too close to the mirror and never picture what God sees in us. I enjoyed your beautiful poem all around.
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    I was going to just quote the last three lines. Then I read it again. There's no way I can quote any part of this poem without the rest of it! It's like sitting at a table, with the place settings there, without the food! (can you tell it's close to dinner time?)

    I could see it all, the woman in front of the mirror, not really seeing what's there, lost in memories. ...Empty eyes...speak so much! I've been there. I've looked in the mirror and wondered where the woman everyone described to me was. It's a haunting memory I will never lose.

    hugs,
    Gail

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