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    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    this poem is a piece of lint,
    sorry I can't be as good as those,
    who we're heaven-sent,

    So I struggled through the feeling and the saddest songs,
    watched true-belivers show me that hope is never gone,

    Is it too late to pack up and leave?,
    when what you're running away from,
    follows you then thieves,

    I had a revelation that I knew my world,
    instaed of it going around me like some strange blur,

    Is desperation all we're good for?,
    still retreating from life,
    in search of gratification,

    I guess I learned to suck it up,
    and drink the world like its in my cup,

    the rush is on and I can't help but love,
    because of her I'll never think about giving up.

    Amzy A friend, Well met.

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    Redemption is here, Erik! I enjoyed this one, and it's even inspirational.


    Posted By Amzy | Dec 10, 2006
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    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    thanks amz yay I no longer suck,

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    Starts out sad then builds to an upbeat ending! Very nicely done, Erik!


    Posted By Altree94 | Dec 10, 2006
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    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    thanks tree, yeah i could've kept it sad but I guess a light in the tunnell
    is better

    v3sista U Know Me

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    "E"-


    :sign_dito: This is what we know U can do...There is HOPE in this, did U do this one after UR review that momentarily discouraged U? Sounds like U wrote this as proof that U R still in the game and will run on...Even if U didn't write this as a result, it is a good write and offers inspiration. (Amzy) :sun:

    V3


    Posted By v3sista | Dec 11, 2006
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    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    actualy veloria I did write this as a result you see my haste was the mistake of the stone woman usually I reveiew over and over andthen pick out one of my best to post here i didn't do that in the case of the stone woman I just posted a rushed, unlooked over piece,

    thanks v3 I'm still in the game

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