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    JolieH JPiC Contributor

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    San Diego Fires

    Autumn leaves take flight on Santa Ana winds.
    Gusts roar like locomotive San Diego bound, on which
    a hungry spirit comes to rage a dragon’s war
    dressed for Halloween on doorstep takes her treat.

    A witches tongue spits embers into October skies.
    Black smoke billows from her stage of flaming set,
    as sirens scream like Satan’s fans through city streets
    and neighborhoods of falling ash and scorched corsage.

    Her story drew attention across the glob, as
    firefighters battled flames for three straight nights.
    Five hundred thousand men, woman, children, and pets
    took refuge in city schools, and stadium, waiting

    Where on cot and blanket wondered about their homes
    stomachs churned in twisted anticipation
    as sleepy news reporters followed her trail
    posting addresses of burned homes across the screen.

    President and governor did come to town,
    drawing military force to fight from copters.
    Acres of water dropped through billowing smoke
    hardly phased her massive strike.

    Not till devil winds did die, was she contained
    as caravans of fire engines met her stand,
    spilling tanks of water on her flaming tongue
    to douse her fiery breath.


    Posted By JolieH | Nov 4, 2007
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    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    this is a subject where there could be no exagerration,

    great poem
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    PaintedDiary JPiC Mentor

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    :wow: Jolie...that is something! I quite do not know what to say...the poem is the epitome of this disaster and depicts this superbly. Just wow.

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    Your first two verses immortalized the living entity that raced across the landscape with no respect to persons. They are written with such force... such spectacle. Then, as with the actual event, you brought us the despair in the fires wake and finally the possibility of closure. Exciting with vivid movement, color and passion. Very well done.

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    Posted By feralpen | Nov 5, 2007
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    Aumakua Misunderstood

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    :welldone: Amazing! I Keep hearing about those fires TT.TT ... This poem is really deep and full of such incredible meaning. I could so clearly not only feel but imagine everything you wrote about. From this it seems the fires are affecting you personally... are they? =o


    Posted By Aumakua | Nov 6, 2007
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    JolieH JPiC Contributor

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    Thanks for all your kind comments.
    Riha, I was affected by the fires. We were evacuated for three nights and four days. Our house is on the outskirts of town, and it's surround by mountains. The fire was only a few mile to the east and south of us. I didn't think the fire would burn our house because the mountains surrounding my neighborhood burned in the 2003 fires. We were evacuated then too, and I thought our house burned. But the firemen saved our neighborhood from fires all around. We have a lot of old trees in the neighborhood and one that covers my back patio, I thought sure it would catch a burning ember, but we were lucky. I went to my brothers house and watched the news the whole time.


    Posted By JolieH | Nov 7, 2007
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    leaddoginteriors CON-FUSALED

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    Hey there Jolie,
    I love it, especially the picture your poem paints acurate carnage as if the devils own breath was unleashed, excellent work.
    p.s
    I would realy love for you to e-mail a copy of the photo. thanks

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