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    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    SEASON'S CHANGE ~ OTTAVA RIMA

    Autumn fades to winter then blooms to spring
    and in between a tick shines summer sun.
    The season's change as fast as bird’s take wing.
    Seems just as one begins it’s almost done,
    then back around again with one more swing
    as the hands of time are fast-forward spun.
    Whether crimson leaves, flurries, sun or rain,
    each season has a walk down nature’s lane.

    © July 26, 2007 Karen Davies


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    Posted By Moonchild | Feb 12, 2008
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    Terence Member

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    Hi Karen, a very pleasant, balmy stroll through the seasons. Haven't seen many Ottava Rima poems outside of the Sonetto Rispetto form. You've done nicely with this.

    Terence


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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Hey KAREN - this poem is so lovely - It would look fantastic as a featured on the NEW JPiC Affiliate site GreetingsGalleryOnline.com :yes3: --- Really though - the images you present really do personify the seasons and especially are representative of the picture you posted with... Which would be wonderful to present on GreetingsGalleryOnline.com as well :blush2: --- Did you make the image too?

    Lovely work = Thanx for sharing it!

    Jacquii.


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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    In fact...... Since I was working in my graphics program.... :blush2: With your permission - I would love to put this card in the Poetry section of GreetingsGalleryOnline.com --- Eventually - I'll be announcing the GGO and will be putting a new section on JPiC specifically for the showcasing of poetry on greeting cards...

    Let me know what you think ;)

    Jacquii.

    ps - Once again - beautiful nature poem and the ottava rima format really worked nicely!

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    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Feb 12, 2008
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    Lindamay JPiC Contributor

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    I love this, it brings a sense of warmth as you move through the seasons, whether physically, or emotionally.


    Posted By Lindamay | Feb 12, 2008
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    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    Thank you so much Terence, I appreciate your kind words :)


    Posted By Moonchild | Feb 12, 2008
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    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    Oh I think it's a great idea MsJacquii
    and I'd be honored to be featured there!
    I didn't do the artwork though and I'm
    not sure who did. Thanks so much for
    this opportunity to be featured among so many talented authors(hugs)
    BTW...the poem looks great!


    Posted By Moonchild | Feb 12, 2008
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    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    good work moonchild,
    I think this poem deserves every bit of praise,
    I think also your the first person to be in msJ's greeting gallery
    I'd be glad to be in sometime, you certainly has set a precedence
    for the cards, I can't slack off when I do mine

    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    Thank you Erickesta.
    I think you'll do just fine :)


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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Moonchild - I love the poem as it takes us through each season, and especially when combined with the love graphics above...they are my favorite kind of art...

    lovely work Karen!

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    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    Thank you so much Nomad.
    Jacquii did a great job with the graphics, I agree.


    Posted By Moonchild | Feb 29, 2008
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    Intricate soul intricate soul

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    I love it! hmmm, makes me wonder is this form in our poetry defined site?

    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    Hey thanks IS and I'm not sure.
    I never saw that section before.
    I'll have to check it out.
    Thanks for teh read and reply and I'm
    glad you liked it :)


    Posted By Moonchild | Mar 1, 2008
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    lovely poem...love the structure...well done:)


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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Yep - the Octava Rima is indeed in the Poetry-Defined section: http://jpicforum.info/types-poetry/ottava-rima-726.html - Lots and lots of forms there KAREN - sure it will pique your interest ;) --- ALSO will get around to putting up guidelines for the NEW Greeting Cards Inspirations (aspirations? not sure exactly what to call it yet...) section soon - Actually not been at my desk as often as I'd like lately...

    AND - the greeting card as it appears on GreetingsGalleryOnline.com is below - wanted to put the site name on it so it's really one-of-a-kind ;)

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    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Mar 2, 2008
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    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    Thanks a bunch Solo, glad you loved it!


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    Kit Carson JPiC Contributor

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    Very nice Karen! Love the way you weaved the birds in there...they seem to herald the changing seasons every bit as much as the leaves.


    Posted By Kit Carson | Mar 2, 2008
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    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    They sure do Kit!
    :thankyou: for your kind reply :)


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