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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Slim, skyscraper high
    and fresh-blood red
    shoes to kill
    for
    shoes adorning
    a killer’s sweet feet
    man-killer…that is!
    She sashays in...
    attention-grabbing hips
    undulating like a
    smooth knowing wave
    caressing mother sea
    mile long legs climbed
    way up, up, up
    as far as the eye could see
    “fuck-me” micro mini
    daring
    you NOT to take a closer look
    even as it teased and taunted
    gripping the bellies of
    the drooling fools
    magnetic currents
    short-circuited
    brains
    eyes popping as they
    reached the double Ds
    swiftly skimming by
    tiny waist
    delectable hills dipped
    pillowing the shadowed valley
    un-foretold pleasure
    being imagined...
    no one saw the soft
    graceful caramel-colored neck
    tense with emotion...
    the almond eyes darting
    this way and that
    mostly downcast
    hiding tears
    against the curly hair
    from being recently
    manhandled and harassed
    in the dark hallway
    on the way from the restroom
    on Halloween
    in her she-devil
    costume...
    the only one she could
    borrow last minute
    for the "work party"
    her boss told her
    was mandatory.
    She'd never known this
    before in her jeans
    and baggy shirts.
    Why did she listen to
    Jennifer in Shipping
    who loved the attention?

    Is it the “temptress”
    or the uncontrolled
    that’s guilty here?

    © nomadicrhymer

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    Jer4clarity Lover of Meanings

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    Whoa Pard! this is a sad story though and I know that you are talking about someone else...But this was a really riveting piece..

    Good writing MY fav:

    mostly downcast
    hiding tears
    against the curly hair
    from being recently
    manhandled and harassed
    in the dark hallway
    on the way from the restroom
    on Halloween
    in her she-devil
    costume...


    Jerry

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    Aww.. such a sad twist.. I like the question on the end, especially...


    Posted By ~Serenity~ | Aug 30, 2007
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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Jer, thanks for taking time out to read and comment...appreciate it! Glad you "got" this one.

    Nomad
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    :bravothanx: :thankyou: Thank you kindly for reading and commenting, chica! Waiting for the answer to that question...:sendmail:

    Nomad
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Hmmmm - I'd say never really the "uncontrolled's" fault when the other is basically all-out taking advantage! Anyway - what a write MS N - fastpaced, this one. Interesting to the very end - But you do have a nice way of story-telling within the poetic strata - so to say. I like what JER said: Riveting!

    Certainly is!

    That passage was really an attention-grabber to say the very least - Kinda sounds like me before I re-gained 200 lbs LOL..... Uncontrolled eh? The question at the end of your poem is very well placed. Makes the reader actually think for a moment and ponder life's mystery! She-Devil indeed - Interesting piece - as interesting as the costume I'd imagine :girl_devil: LOL

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Aug 31, 2007
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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Ms. J, thanks for reading and gracing this one with your fabulous and always-entertaining commentary!! I appreciate your dropping in...

    "uncontrolled" I wasn't and still am not, certain it's the right word, but haven't come up with a better one yet. Still thinking through the whole scenario since it kinda morphed this way on it's own...

    Nomad
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    ah! meta-morphosis perhaps? Definitely a most interesting write MS N!

    JAcquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Sep 5, 2007
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    sad penning nomad and a riveting story
    hugs kisses
    bear


    Posted By Bear | Sep 6, 2007
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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Thanks Bear!

    Nomad
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    Ouch Nomad...... being the recipient of unwanted and uninvited attention is never good. I am sorry you experienced that. Some Men can be such pigs that never think past their Dicks. Hence the term dickhead. :drinks: to the enlightened man who knows a real woman needs and deserves more than a grope before the ultimate deed. Very well versed write hon.

    Mysty


    Posted By Mysty | Sep 6, 2007
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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Thanks for commenting on this one Mysty...I appreciate the time you took to read!

    Nomad

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